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The Apartment
Contributed by
Miss_Erika
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Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 02:59:50 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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She lived in an old apartment
above the corner store
she used to have big dreams
but she doesn't have them anymore.
she thought her life was true
but it was all made up of lies
there goes her loving heart
there goes her big blue eyes.
as they cut her from the ceiling
her parents began to cry
they'll never understand
why she thought she had to die.
while they layed her in the caughin
she was knocking on heavens door
and she shall not be forgotten
as the girl who lived in the old apartment
above the corner store.
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Miss_Erika
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2004-08-20 02:59:50]
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Re: The Apartment
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 03:11:38 AM AEST
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| Tragically beautiful. you are a wonderful poet. |
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Re: The Apartment
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 03:52:30 AM AEST
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Yes, tragic and rhythmic, with a certain vivid quality. Although you spelled 'coffin' wrong (an interesting alternative, I thought), a few errors can't spoil a poem with a heart like this one.
Welcome to YPDC. |
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Re: The Apartment
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by Archie on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 04:19:02 AM AEST
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| This is a very sad story. I have friends who have attempted suicide. It is very sad to lose some one because of this. Great write. |
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