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untitled
Contributed by
spider
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Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 07:01:25 PM in AEST
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oops
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This message which passes without leave The unsaid in the said, the undone in the done What you say and what you mean Are two completely different things The theory of reality And the reality in theory are often Confused Some say my heart died first My body is all thats left to die But whether u killed me partially, Or completely I feel so far from myself and will continue to... Until you are With your twisted words Twisted meaning, twisted heart So far away from me You no longer hold place In my heart or bitter memories
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2004-08-20 19:01:25] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: untitled
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 10:27:33 PM AEST (User
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very good. maybe you can do a rewrite if you want and explain more if you wish. you could create a title that fits the greatness of this piece. =] |
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Re: untitled
(User Rating: 1 ) by Pyrofungus on
Saturday, 21st August 2004 @ 04:02:16 PM AEST (User
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i think its pretty good
most people don't say what they mean...they mix it all up...
I like it, and can relate to it on different levels
please comment on my work too
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