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Sink
Contributed by
blueheart
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Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 02:35:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Curtains lifted and she revels in the sunrise,
Away from the hollow trails of her dreary, dreary nights,
Enthused, she confronts the very things that haunt her,
Yet as dawn leaves the skeletons draw near.
She sinks,
Into the impetuous stains,
Diamond teardrops snipped,
Though she tries and tries again.
The world can never hold her in its hands,
It caresses her with empty answers,
And she's crumpled beneath the avalanche.
She has whirlwinds on her narrow paths,
Broken fragments sweep into the maddening warp,
Specks of fading trust shatter the slabs of her mind,
Her resolutions disabled as the blemishes smile.
And she sinks,
Into the corners of the black sheet,
Another soul wasted away.
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blueheart
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2004-08-22 02:35:09]
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Re: Sink
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by emystar on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 02:57:18 AM AEST
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Very powerfull, creative, a bit sad, written masterpeice.
U go now , that's awesome writing!
huggs, luv, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Sink
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by venkat on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 05:36:38 AM AEST
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| Wow..wonderful..very well written..though a bit sad..best of luck. :-)venkat |
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Re: Sink
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 08:42:19 AM AEST
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Beautifully written, so much sorrow, loss, the emotions just seem to mix with each word, awesome poem.
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Re: Sink
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by Baronhawk on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 10:48:41 AM AEST
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An appropriately titled work perhaps for in its shadow I too find myself sinking into the oblivion of such synergetic ironies. Sink..sink...sink... Indeed.
Very descriptive...very immersive adn powerful write! Good job!
'What are we to the world but a collection of failed dreams adn wasted souls...methinks...sigh." Words fom LAN. |
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Re: Sink
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 02:10:58 PM AEST
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Good to see your work again. This is so sad and echoes the feeling I have right now. But I do know the sun will shine again there a positve things to look for in life.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: Sink
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by Hurretje on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 03:17:10 AM AEST
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Great, dark, wonderful threatening images...
Pure art.
Hugs,
Hur |
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Re: Sink
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by Overstated on
Sunday, 12th September 2004 @ 05:22:46 AM AEST
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| excellent dark poetic piece of poetry fantastic inspiring stuff! |
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Re: Sink
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by Ronald on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 10:36:12 AM AEST
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| Your skill seems to bloom from day to day. That's good. I love this piece. Interesting and it has deep meanings. Hope to see you write more poems tata... |
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Re: Sink
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by emystar on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 09:25:38 PM AEST
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Sad but written like apro.
Good work.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Sink
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by Hurretje on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 03:16:35 AM AEST
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This is dark beauty...wonderfully written..a devouring vortex...
I loved reading it.
Hugs,
Hur |
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Re: Sink
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 11:23:18 AM AEST
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wow...such desolution....hopes shredded away.
Powerfully done! |
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Re: Sink
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by Avarice_Riot on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 11:59:43 PM AEST
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| I love and admire the way you are able to find beauty in sorrow and turn it into a masterpiece like this. Kudos to you. :) |
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