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Tears
Contributed by
AWaiTinG13FaTe
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Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 12:12:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Frozen tears of love fall down.
Shattering upon the blood stained ground.
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AWaiTinG13FaTe
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2004-08-22 12:12:05]
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Re: Tears
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Sunday, 22nd August 2004 @ 12:26:41 PM AEST
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it seems interestng... like just one stanza.., though definitely a pleasing one, perhaps a little explanation to the blood and the tears and why they are frozen...
a little work and you coudl change it rather nicely into a haiku
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Re: Tears
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by skyblumoon on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 11:34:49 AM AEST
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I liked it. The two lines said alot. You could build on it and make it even better.
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