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broken
Contributed by
Hannah_Heaven
on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 10:12:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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im broken
sprawled on the soft dirt
drenched in my own self-destruction
stained with my own blood
breathless because there is no more fresh air to inhale
the stench of death lingers
and i calopse inside
my heart deformed
presented in the form,of two tear-drops upside down
now frozen
the mist flows through me
and every blink i take
i can feel the poison running in every single pore
i dont feel right
i wasnt strong enough
to live without you
your own two words
brought my heaven crashing down
to pit-stop in hell
im lost between dreams and reality
confused with the kiss that didnt mean anything
haunted by your voice
its draining my soul from my limp body
my lips parted
left split
my eyes wide open
underneath the lips of time
im laying down
slipping away
im becoming weaker
im broken
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Hannah_Heaven
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2004-08-23 10:12:05]
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Re: broken
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by purplestary on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 10:18:43 AM AEST
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wow...awsome write....
"presented in the form,of two tear-drops upside down
now frozen"
those lines are so great....
this write was expressed so well...i loved it.
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Re: broken
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 23rd August 2004 @ 05:00:09 PM AEST
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Han this was a remarkable poem....I was so enthralled in it, I was alarmed when it ended! Do you ever write anything but dark poetry?
Timing is great, and the lyrics shake your reader into reality!
Great Dreadful Dark Write.
Took me the height!!!!
Poetic hugs
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Re: broken
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 03:23:02 AM AEST
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man! this one's better then the last of your poems that i read, and i thought nothing could compare better than that!
i can defently relate with your feeligs.
how can you EXPRESS YOUR-SELF SO EASILY? your talent is imense! |
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