|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Waiting for fire
Contributed by
Ryoko
on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 02:43:52 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
|
Verticle metalic planes flying,
back and forth from water pits,
I'm on one side and your on the other,
miles of landscape between us.
Acceptance swells my infernal soul,
i dont have to wait much longer,
confusion plants itself on my brain,
I'll avoid your being forever.
samurai trials and wars fasinate,
All that i can remember and feel,
Leaving memories of you behind,
Trampled weeds in the ground.
Wounds slowly seeping into skin,
slight mark seen on white paper,
prefered death has no name,
It'll end without my wish.
Somehow the static overtakes,
functions controlling my mouth,
obsanities form on the tip of my tongue,
but they've always been there.
Waiting turns into years,
whem im old enough to understand,
Matches and oil surround me,
i dont have to wait for the fire much longer.
Copyright ©
Ryoko
... [
2004-08-24 02:43:52]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Waiting for fire
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 05:51:27 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I can really feel this poem, (yeah that sounds weird) but the anger, and angst just flows from every line. Very emotional, as I read I could feel my guts tighten, thats how I know I'm reading something really great. Thank you for writing this, I really am looking forward to reading much of your work.
Peace and Kumquats-
E. Raven |
|
|
Re: Waiting for fire
(User Rating: 1 )
by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 09:53:26 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I really liked this....theres so much emotion in it and anger.....great write...excellent job
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
