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Undocumented Alien
Contributed by
Merry
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Wednesday, 25th August 2004 @ 05:57:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
dedicatedpoems
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In and out the window
Flashes of brilliance
Too quick to grasp
Gone again
Dreamt them all anyway
Not a part of waking
Where nothing stirs
For hours and hours
Silence whirs, fan in the window
Time slices ideas to shreds
Merciless incrimination
Atrocity killed you as sure as a gun
Crunching syllables like vegetables
We walk in the rain
Wearing brown expressions
I told you my name
You protested it was too much information
So I kept quiet for the next 3 hours
Wishing I knew you
Broken bones connected to sadness
Stung by hatred
Half believing every word
Half wondering what the hell you were talking about
Kept my attention
Brutal honesty without ambiguity
No tricks up your sleeve
Just trying to breathe in and out
Copyright ©
Merry
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2004-08-25 17:57:01]
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Re: Undocumented Alien
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 28th August 2004 @ 11:58:48 PM AEST
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vivid, beautifully real, love your choice of well woven words here gaille:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Undocumented Alien
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 29th August 2004 @ 03:15:25 PM AEST
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You need an "e" on breathe in the last line. Otherwise, this is pure perfection. I can't tell you how awed and envious I am of your work.
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