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Watching
Contributed by
rookiepoet
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Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 09:36:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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When I was with you
I'd know where I stand
Curled up, surrendered
In the palm of your hand
But your hand, it seems,
Was too big for me,
Such a fragile soul
Too small to see
For the hand of a God,
Immortal and free
Could not have time
For a child like me
So now that you're gone
Off soaring on high
Alone will I wait
My eyes on the sky
Watching for my love
Too lofty to see
For one day I pray
You'll come back to me
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2004-08-26 21:36:25]
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Re: Watching
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 26th August 2004 @ 10:52:06 PM AEST
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Re: Watching
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by MomentInTime on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 02:30:06 AM AEST
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Mayhaps I am biased towards poems which rhyme and flow, still, this is one of a few poems on this site I've wanted to read more than once (apart from mine that is lol)
Superb is a word that comes to mind
Jordan oxo |
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Re: Watching
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by AspenGlow on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 03:32:29 AM AEST
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Very beautiful poem.
Thanks for sharing.
Chris |
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Re: Watching
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 27th August 2004 @ 07:03:52 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC! What a beautiful introduction to your poetry!
Curled up, surrendered
In the palm of your hand
Gosh... this struck me! I couldn't help but have Anne Geddes thoughts... those tiny little babes, all curled up in little balls. Helpless... but so very peaceful.
Beautifully done! Please stick around and share some more of your work. I, for one, am interested in reading more,
SNM |
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Re: Watching
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 07:54:29 AM AEST
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Very rarely do they come back. The fragility you mention would be your undoing in this relationship, if it is indeed, accurately portrayed in this poem.
I'd like to think you can write positively about the future, and hope that you can procure this kind of poem and attribute it to something (as I see it) less futile and more constructive.
Welcome to YPDC.
Keep writing. |
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Re: Watching
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by Hakiokusaken on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 05:03:06 PM AEST
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Wow, this is a very good poem. I'm glad I read it. It was write beautifully and with so much feeling and emotion. Excellent Job. Keep them coming.
HAKIOKUSAKEN |
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Re: Watching
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by kidpoet_213 on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 08:14:35 PM AEST
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WOW! What a beautifully written poem!!! Welcome to YPDC!
~Donna~ |
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Re: Watching
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by cheech on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 08:15:22 PM AEST
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~VERY VERY GOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK,I CAN RELATE TO THIS 1 BUT I'D RATHER THEM NOT COME BACK
~cheech~ |
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Re: Watching
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by Kie-Kie on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 06:43:31 PM AEST
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Very well written...andn I thought you said you couldn't compare to my own...I think you've done a far better job than I ever have...Great job and keep up the good work...*smiles*
Love Ya'll & Take Care,
~Kie-Kie~ |
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