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Echo Avalanche
Contributed by
deadreckoning1983
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Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 03:08:53 AM in AEST
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In the back of my mind I am drowning,
I only wish you cared enought to pull me out.
In this tidal wave ballet,
My fingers dance along the surface.
Swept up with the current,
The waves are waving goodbye blue sky.
It's a ghost ship cemetary.
Masts rise from the waters,
Headstones for those lost;
And champagne still floats thru the night.
The music is getting softer,
As my heart does the waltz with the reaper.
All the while I scream to speak
Just to hear the echo avalanche.
Hoping you can hear me over the symphony of strings.
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deadreckoning1983
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2004-08-31 03:08:53]
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Re: Echo Avalanche
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 07:28:42 AM AEST
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that's some goo suff here.
i like it alot.
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Re: Echo Avalanche
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by artostuff on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 03:11:27 PM AEST
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| I like this, very good imagery. I especially liked the last 5 lines. Thank you for sharing. |
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Re: Echo Avalanche
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by theMoth on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 03:33:02 PM AEST
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| Man, "ghost ship cemetary"... this is some cool ****! You did your thang with this theme quite masterfully. It's exciting to see someone's work I really dig. You get the old Mothy-BruceCampbell-EvilDead-"Groovee" for this one. --Mothy |
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Re: Echo Avalanche
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by katyqueen35 on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 02:03:02 AM AEST
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I am like in AWWWW.
wow this is great .you are truely talented.
This poem is like scary yet beautiful.
what a twist. |
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Re: Echo Avalanche
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by cuddlytiger17 on
Saturday, 16th October 2004 @ 04:52:45 PM AEST
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This is a great write. I especially liked the lines "It's a ghost ship cemetary." and "The music is getting softer,
As my heart does the waltz with the reaper.
All the while I scream to speak
Just to hear the echo avalanche." Pure genious. Bravo. |
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Re: Echo Avalanche
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 11th December 2004 @ 02:59:40 AM AEST
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| beautiful |
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Re: Echo Avalanche
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by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 23rd November 2014 @ 11:35:55 AM AEST
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ahh drowning
oh so well done.
How did I miss this flow
good stuff.... |
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Re: Echo Avalanche
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 24th November 2014 @ 09:07:16 PM AEST
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Eerie. Unsettling even. You really set the tone!
Great use of metaphor and imagery.
~Scorp |
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