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Splinter
Contributed by
pixie
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Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 04:09:34 PM in AEST
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I have a splinter imbedded in my mind,
Past hasnt been in the least bit kind,
All it knows is how to hurt & taunt,
Its nasty, callous ways it loves to flaunt.
Night after night I feel it burrow deeper,
It has no watcher or no keeper,
No-one can control where it wants to go,
It hides away so that no-one can ever know.
The hurt long became too much to bare,
Of the long term damage I am well aware,
I once gave up on finding this heathen,
Grew sick & tired of all the deceiving.
The longer I leave my splinter,
The longer my heart & soul will live in Winter,
To remove this thing finally from my brain,
Will finally be the end of all my pain.
I am going to do all that is in my power,
To give my insides a well deserved shower,
Wash all the traces of my past once & for all away,
This is a cruel game that has been too long in play.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2004-08-31 16:09:34]
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Re: Splinter
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 04:24:26 PM AEST
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Bravo, bravo, my girl. Krissy, you can do it. You already realize that is the problem so you are halfway there. I know you can and will do it. Sometimes being headstrong can be good thing!! lol
Love,
Rita |
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Re: Splinter
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by purplestary on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 04:24:33 PM AEST
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*grabs the tweezers, a blanket, and some hot chocolate!* awsome write!
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Re: Splinter
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by inoc on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 05:14:19 PM AEST
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thankyou for a nice write
well done!!
the last verse - is superb!
cheers! |
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Re: Splinter
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by afterdark on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 05:38:53 PM AEST
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Very good..This is another good one for you..Glad to have read it..
AfterDark.. |
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Re: Splinter
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 05:47:20 PM AEST
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| amazing write. i loved your analogy. well you cant erase the past only move on from it. such conforting words, eh? you just have to find a way to use it to good means to never make the same mistakes or get in the same situations again, of course i cant manage that simple task =] the present is here to make an alternate past for a different future. |
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Re: Splinter
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by Soulless on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 08:58:21 PM AEST
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I love the descriptions and emotions etched into this piece. Very well done.
Kisses,
~Brooke~ |
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Re: Splinter
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by Rhei76 on
Tuesday, 31st August 2004 @ 11:04:58 PM AEST
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Excellent write.
God bless |
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Re: Splinter
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 02:48:16 AM AEST
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| Amazing..as always captivating. venkat |
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Re: Splinter
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by Doriens_Picture on
Thursday, 2nd September 2004 @ 05:18:20 PM AEST
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Everything I feel right now
Is of a consequence of you
How I honestly and truly admire you
Unconditionally and entirely
I love the way you write
Its beautifully sad and enwrapping
Your talent is magnificent and paramount
And you are all inspiring
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