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As Death becomes me
Contributed by
brokensoul
on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 01:47:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I am watching my body
lying motionless on the ground
i am waiting for the moment
when i hear my hearts last pound
i cannot leave
until my life is completely done
i am waiting as death becomes me
finally i have won
what i could i have done
as i stare i wonder
how could i have changed my fate
i am floating higher and my body soon under
i am fading fast
staring at the knife in my bodys chest
my heart will soon stop beating
and i will finally be able to rest
Copyright ©
brokensoul
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2004-09-03 13:47:27]
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Re: As Death becomes me
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by kishdaswani on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 01:52:59 PM AEST
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nicely written....dark very dark but i like the way you wrote it....have you tried writing a light hearted poem? im you you can write beautiful poems, you have the passion and you can clearly express your words.
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Re: As Death becomes me
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by shelby on
Friday, 3rd September 2004 @ 03:04:18 PM AEST
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so dark and sad well written though
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Re: As Death becomes me
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by poetic_ire on
Friday, 17th September 2004 @ 09:13:37 PM AEST
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Hi. It's me. Duh. Anyway, I wanted to comment on your poetry. It's amazing to read it because I never thought of you like this.
You're very articulate in your poetry.
Good Job! |
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