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Emerald Eyes
Contributed by
weepingwillow
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Saturday, 4th September 2004 @ 07:29:17 PM in AEST
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I had a strange feeling that I was being watched
When I looked over my shoulder
I saw a vision that would haunt me for the rest of my days
From the corner of my eyes I saw the figure of a woman
Her face hidden by the shadows, only revealed those eyes
Those brilliant green eyes pierced my heart
And I longed for more
I turned around to see her better
Through the noise of the crowd I could only read her lips
Follow me she said
Then she turned around and all I could see was her curly raven hair
Instantly I ran after her
Knocking into the carnival crowd
The lights and sounds and smells blurred by
As those emerald eyes fixated my mind
I thought for sure I lost her
But there I saw her hair at one of the carnival games
I ran to her and tapped her on the shoulder
When she turned around, I didn't see green eyes
Here I am someone shouted
I turned around and saw her not far away
She beckoned me with her index finger to come
This time I would not lose her
There she is
I saw her go into the funhouse of mirrors
Once inside, she was nowhere to be found
Then I saw her behind me in the mirror
Though her face was distorted
There was no mistaking those eyes
I turned around to find her gone again
But now my mind was racing with visions
I had never caught a full glimpse of her
And now my mind was envisioning a woman of unimaginable beauty
I must find her
I ran from place to place searching for her
Each place would offer no help
Could that be her by the ferris wheel
I will wait I heard her say
I ran to the ferris wheel and she was waiting for me
I nodded at the ride operator and bought two tickets
He shook his head and smiled
Finally we were together
For a long time we sat in silence staring at each other
She was far more beautiful than I had imagined
Her skin was as white and fair as a winter morning snow
Her hair as black as a moonless night in the fall
Her eyes were like a sea of emeralds that absorbed all of my being
Then the ferris wheel began to move
I was too in awe of her to speak
The gentle night breeze and stars above
Provided the perfect frame for us sitting alone on the ferris wheel
She shivered and slid closer to me
The ferris wheel stopped at its apex
We sat for a few minutes more
Then she leaned over and whispered
Kiss me
Our lips touched
Time stopped
And we shared a love for each other that transcended both time and space
Then the ferris wheel began to move again
At the bottom we got off
I asked her What is your name
She said It starts with the sun rise and ends with the sun set
Meet me tomorrow
Where will you be
You'll find me
Then she vanished as quickly as she had appeared earlier
The next day I went to the carnival to find her
But she wasn't there
I went the next day and the day after that
Then the carnival was gone
I waited until the carnival came again the next year
But still she wasn't there
Each year I would come back but she would never be there
One day I realized what she meant about her name
I thought about her when the sun rose until it set
Her face and those eyes forever remained burned into my mind
I will find her one day before the sun sets
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weepingwillow
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Re: Emerald Eyes
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by PoeticMystery on
Saturday, 4th September 2004 @ 08:50:22 PM AEST
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| This was truly awesome! I loved it. I saw it in my mind through the whole read! GREAT! |
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Re: Emerald Eyes
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 4th September 2004 @ 11:51:46 PM AEST
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aww this is really cool! caught my attention immediately :)
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Re: Emerald Eyes
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by Baronhawk on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 10:43:09 AM AEST
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| "Emerald eyes"...perhap you were teased by a nymph there...who seeks to create a yearning in man and then only to vanish torturing him in a lurid dance. Then again it could be hope that seeps once and again into dappled lives to relive and awaken the dreams....oh well...interesthing write! |
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Re: Emerald Eyes
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by Kie on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 11:48:59 AM AEST
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Oh this was like reading a fairy tale/fantasy story. From the opening word I was and am enthralled.
Excellent and I can't say that enough times!
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Re: Emerald Eyes
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by fenris on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 07:33:26 AM AEST
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i thought i had already posted a comment on this poem... but anyway... it is wonderful... and it may be best as is... but perhaps as a challenge exercise... try to convey the same meaning with the fewest words as possible... take care...
ps... looking forward to any updated versions of this poem...
again, take care... |
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