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Left Side
Contributed by
Rae
on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 12:57:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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look at them move,
someone sits there, casting no shadow.
but i feel it and it feels me.
i look past it coz i know you won't see it.
but it won't move like the others do.
beep.
more than 7 numbers.
i wonder if you remember
the time i called you to call me
coz it was dark and cold.
i need you more than you'll ever know.
and they call me a teenager,
and i label myself a kid.
which is which? which do you love?
i dug through my nails,
looking for something not there.
and the books flew off like a fly leaf,
and i'm racing it...
it's like a balloon, tiny in the sky.
i run and run but it's now a dot.
i spilled transparent ink all over the carpet
and i feel it's sinking.
in the forest, they chopped off one tree
but i see it's empty.
kicking the can on the road,
looking back to where i came from,
and there goes the chanting again.
can you hear it?
or is it all in my head?
she's more depressed than i am,
she says.
she's a lot tired than i am,
she complains.
but i see myself trying to fake a smile
just to feel good,
just to let her judgements seem real.
now, i'm part of the pretentious world.
they say that they care
but hyprocrisy is their dish.
i recorded our conversations,
and when this cigarette is all burned out,
my life will be, too.
-rae '03. 120103.
Monday. 12:00AM.
Copyright ©
Rae
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2004-09-05 00:57:26]
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Re: Left Side
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 04:07:21 AM AEST
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Re: Left Side
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by deathdrop on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 04:53:27 AM AEST
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the way you've written this is quite interesting touch to it. it's not how most poets write. i see that other people are just a light wash in comparison to your life of darkness because the others don't quite under stand you... i may have got this wrong, it's just the impression that was given to me by reading.
you've used alo of skill in this to make it understandable, but it's still a little confusing, i liked it all the same though.
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