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Beautiful lies
Contributed by
rookiepoet
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Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 04:05:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The nook of your shoulder
That cradled my head
As I inwardly beamed
At those three words you said
Your green eyes would smoulder
Whispers tickled your ears
In that free, blessed moment
Devoid of all fears
My trembling heart
Did let you in blindly
Begged you to love me
Treat me ever so kindly
And love me you said
But ne'er did you feel it
How my broken heart cries
Not a thing now can heal it
Oh your beautiful lies
How they burn at my soul
Your sweet, murderous lips
Made this cavernous hole
Echoes of the past
Destroying my trust
Because you never loved me
You were blinded by lust
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Re: Beautiful lies
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by Kie on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 04:45:21 PM AEST
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Your poem was so achingly sad and filled with alot of pain stemming from being hurt.
I don't know what to say or how to comfort you if this is a personal poem of yours. But based on what I read in your author's notes I will say that lying only delays the inevitable, regardless when it is over, it's gonna hurt.
Hang in there with the rest of us....
Enjoyed your poem as well.
Kie |
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Re: Beautiful lies
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by Hakiokusaken on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 05:18:17 PM AEST
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GREAT JOB. This is a very emotional poem. Sometimes I'd rather be lied to than told the truth. I like the way each of the lines tell so much. Well hang in there, we all go through heart break at some point in our life. Keep up the good work.
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Re: Beautiful lies
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 06:22:15 PM AEST
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| The less experience you have with love, the harder it is to tell the difference between that and lust. Actually love has to be grown over time, and these days we are loathe to give it that much time. You're right, it's too easy to say those three words in the desire of the moment. Great poem. |
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Re: Beautiful lies
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 07:55:15 PM AEST
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| So...my first initial reaction to this poem is to cry, because, it's true. At least for me it was a while ago. I love the imagery and the light flowy feel this poem has. Thanks for sharing it!! |
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Re: Beautiful lies
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by cheech on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 08:07:20 PM AEST
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i feel ur feelings,ur not alone i was with 1 that lied constently then i gave up something to him that i really shouldnt have,anyway i really liked this 1 keep up the good work
cheech |
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Re: Beautiful lies
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by kidpoet_213 on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 08:07:35 PM AEST
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Yeah... sometimes I'd rather be told lies than hear the truth... because the truth hurts sometimes... but when it comes to love... deep down... I would rather hear the truth... and I would rather tell someone I loved the truth and not just string them along...
if u love someone let them know it... love and love alone shall set u free...
~A line from a poem I wrote along time ago~
Good poem... lot of emotion there... keep writing... loved it!
~Donna~ |
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Re: Beautiful lies
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by New_York_Chick on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 09:27:25 PM AEST
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| this poem can make anyone cry |
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Re: Beautiful lies
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 7th September 2004 @ 12:54:46 AM AEST
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This is obviously a relatable piece for so many (myself included). The truth can be pretty crummy at times. *sigh*
Nicely done-
SNM |
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