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Last Journy
Contributed by
Luka
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Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 07:37:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You saw the product of it all
rose to the top just to fall
damage is done
like a crumpled up paper
I cant be perfect again
is this the cure
or the disease
walk all over me
as I pray on bloddy knees
come walk in
my world of wonders
now you see
why I live down under
hell bound or not
I really dont care
where I end up
has to be fair
way on top just to fall
this could have been anyones call
I cant seem to make it go away
I cant seem to make it stop
thats the way it is
when your body fully drops
death awaits around the bend
this could be my last journy
this could be the end
Copyright ©
Luka
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2004-09-06 19:37:03]
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Re: Last Journy
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by Nazmythian on
Monday, 6th September 2004 @ 07:43:23 PM AEST
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I like the poem, very descriptive. But I'm not sure I agree with the author's introductory statement, I don't believe you have to be angry to write well. ( strictly my opinion )
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Re: Last Journy
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by Xeald on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 05:58:14 PM AEST
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i didnt read the poem but i just want to say: when are we cuttin the hair? you have your away message on so i did it hear.....
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Re: Last Journy
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by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 14th October 2004 @ 09:26:04 PM AEST
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I agree with Naz completely.... I like the poem and I think you should keep writing... anger or no anger.
Hoping you'll consider it,
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