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Time Changes Much
Contributed by
wachumiri
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Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 04:21:07 PM in AEST
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You tear apart, my Love, in tears
These doubtless fed by growing fears
Afraid of what new change may bring
Afraid of doubt, of anything
Time changes much, time changes men
But love, by time, is strengthened then
It grows in strength and loyalty
It grows in grace and purity
Things change in time, I know for sure
And it takes time the heart to cure
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Jenni_K on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 04:33:02 PM AEST
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Great write..love it...... and words so true..
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 04:43:05 PM AEST
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You're the consummate love poet here. I'm not sure how many you've written exactly, but its more than I have, for sure, and all the ones I've read have been meaningful and well-written. This is no exception.
Everything you've said is true, and that is the strength of this poem. A weakness may be the final line, which could be either done with some punctuation, or line breaks between 'time', 'the' and 'heart' and 'to'.
A minor nuance, which doesn't particularly affect the effect of this work.
Well done and keep writing, thanks. |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 04:59:55 PM AEST
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| excellent write. |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by poetmarie on
Wednesday, 8th September 2004 @ 05:01:54 PM AEST
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| Very nice. Like the phrasing and flow. |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by faith_my_eyes on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 08:24:20 PM AEST
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Ah, David, wonderful write! It is wonderful to see you get your artistic bearings back. And it encouraged me. :-)
Em |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Pyrofungus on
Tuesday, 14th September 2004 @ 05:37:04 PM AEST
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Wow...very good...I agree completely with what you said..."If you're meant to be with the person you love, there will be a way." That's pretty much they way I've always looked at it...great poem bro...
please comment on my work too
summer
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 20th September 2004 @ 06:43:47 PM AEST
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*scratches chin*
Hmm. None too ill done here, Jack. You may be climbing. Though I must point out that the 'then' in stanza 3 is there for no other purpose than to facilitate the rhyme, which annoyeth me.
But no matter. Good piece.
Andrew |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Tanmaya on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 06:45:48 AM AEST
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Very well-written.
I like what you are saying here.
That time brings change, and change can be a scary thing. But... real love grows with time, and is strengthened with time.
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by eatfresh22 on
Wednesday, 22nd September 2004 @ 09:40:58 PM AEST
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Yes, the idea of the poem is quite a good one, yet who are you speaking of? Me? I am not afraid of change...in fact change is exactly the object of my pursuit. *confused* I am glad to see that you poeticism is finding it's way back into that ever loving heart of yours. Nicely done.
~Carrie~ |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 02:38:49 AM AEST
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you know what David? your heart must be overflowing with love. I do enjoy reading your work.
wildejohnny. |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Lovingangel4u on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 03:59:10 PM AEST
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Wonderful write David. So true.
Take Care
~Carmen~ |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by justjonesy on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 08:33:00 PM AEST
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| this brings out a great message...and a great flow = great poem |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Archie on
Monday, 12th September 2005 @ 10:12:54 AM AEST
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| This poem to me describes what i need to let time do for me. You speak with great wisdom and it does not take many words to discover your heart. Thanks for writing this. |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by anitajames on
Monday, 19th September 2005 @ 10:35:02 AM AEST
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| You did a great job putting fears about love into words. This poem inspired me to write one about fear. When I have it finished I will share it. Thank you. |
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 5th October 2005 @ 08:29:29 AM AEST
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David you have such a loving heart. Your poem pours out loving emotions. With each write I read of yours I am intrigued even more.
Beautifully written as always.
*hugs*
Sue
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Re: Time Changes Much
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by Lilly-Quill on
Tuesday, 18th April 2006 @ 02:32:14 PM AEST
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Wow, a very good work. Men fear many things, but mostly change and love. Can't recall 'the wisdom of this' being expressed so clearly exquisite.
Awe-inspiring muse~!
~Lilly-Quill |
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