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Suicide's Whore
Contributed by
screwup
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Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 06:41:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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attempted death so many times
suicide in so many rymes
all I think about anymore
I swear I've got to be suicide's whore
rope around my neck,
inside I am a reck
gun to my head
fear in my eyes
I want to die
slit my throat
I want to hide
get away from those who betray me
someday maybe they'll see
I need love in my life
but instead I have a knife
suicide's whore is at it again
letting the blade sink within
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Re: Suicide's Whore
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by ArdRi79 on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 07:00:55 AM AEST
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| Nice work the cold despair is clostrophobic, lov wont redeem you tho mate and if you expect that it will only make life worse |
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Re: Suicide's Whore
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by pixie on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 07:35:14 AM AEST
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*hugs* I am so sorry that you feel this way, you don't have to be suicides whore, I know you are stronger than that, you are writing about it, thats a start isn't it? *hugs*
a very pained and raw write,
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: Suicide's Whore
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 08:04:58 AM AEST
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This is clear, descriptive, and full. Sounds like it isn't the answer for you.
Stitch |
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Re: Suicide's Whore
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 08:25:44 AM AEST
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I like this.
I think you are strong enough to survive, and like Pixie said, you are writing about it so that's a start.
This is a good poem. The only think i would suggest is, maybe some capital letters. I
also love how it seems to 'speed up' in the middle.
Great write,
Phil xxx
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Re: Suicide's Whore
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by emphaticplacebo on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 08:59:00 AM AEST
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| Great write. Very confronting and raw with your personal emotions. I quite enjoyed reading it and can relate to what youre saying. Good work! |
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Re: Suicide's Whore
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by kidpoet_213 on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 09:52:37 AM AEST
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Hey Babe...
This is a very raw... pained emotional write...
but take it it easy on urself... like the other's have said ur strong... ur writing about it... that's a start... keep it up... PM okay...
Love ya...
~Donna~ |
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Re: Suicide's Whore
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by n2dep2care on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 10:16:08 AM AEST
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Powerful and disturbing! Brave of you to open yourself up and give us a glimpse inside. Very moving write!
Laurie |
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Re: Suicide's Whore
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by jaeann on
Thursday, 9th September 2004 @ 12:22:30 PM AEST
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| right out there ...you layed it on the line......great write...... |
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