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Don't
Contributed by
Clarity
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Thursday, 18th July 2002 @ 06:08:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Don't say that we should just be friends,
We've been down that road before.
Don't try to stop this crazy love,
If you know we both want more.
Don't play like you don't need me,
Cuz I'm your other half.
Don't try and hide your pain away,
I see straight through that laugh.
Don't say that we're not meant to be,
When you think I'll break your heart.
Don't pretend that you aren't hurting more,
Everyday that we're apart.
Don't tell me everything's okay,
If you can't look me in the eye.
Don't say that you'll be fine alone,
We both know that's a lie.
Don't say that I can't want you,
When I know you want me too.
Don't tell me you don't love me,
Cuz you know that isn't true.
Copyright ©
Clarity
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2002-07-18 06:08:33]
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Re: Don't
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by humphdj on
Thursday, 18th July 2002 @ 07:32:46 AM AEST
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I found this smooth snappy and real and I like it a lot.......shoot from the hip!
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Re: Don't
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by Suzy on
Thursday, 18th July 2002 @ 03:48:02 PM AEST
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I love this....it can relate to so many people...
~~~~Lasca~~~~ |
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Re: Don't
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by ghostbear on
Wednesday, 8th January 2003 @ 09:11:58 PM AEST
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Poetry like anything else needs polishing. You do have a sense of energy and a talent for rythmic interaction-however, poetry is a polished, condensed, true form o art, don't insult it with slang and terms like "cuz." It demeans your work. You can do better.
"Don't tell me you don't love me,
You know it isn't true,
The present tense show action,
Condensing it proves it's energy,
Use of exacting terms gives it images
that build it's character. |
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Re: Don't
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 15th January 2003 @ 08:04:08 AM AEST
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| Wonderful poem, and has so much meaning. You do come true in expressing yourself very well. Keep up the great writing :) Ginette |
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