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Candle Light
Contributed by
Overstated
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Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 03:52:19 PM in AEST
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My burning candle trespasses the wind,
As I hide out here, by your porch,
The gate slams outside your house,
My candle cradles my fingers warm,
But inside the candle light its spirit is torn
My burning candle trespasses the wind,
Its strong flame cheats natures tide,
It toils and thinks before it decides,
That theirs nowhere better to be,
Than by your side.
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Overstated
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Re: Candle Light
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 06:25:47 PM AEST
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This kind of takes on the meaning of an illicit rendevous to me. I have read it several times. It is a good poem but the imagery was a bit awkward. Maybe another verse or rework the last one? Keep writing.
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Re: Candle Light
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by PumpkinPie on
Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 11:24:15 PM AEST
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I got the impression that no matter how much you were hurt by this woman,and are still hurting,you're still alive and in love with her.And no matter what comes your way,like the candle in the wind,you won't give out or stop trying to win her heart,every obstacle(wherever they may be,in your heart mind or soul)will never be big enough to wear you out.Nicely done !
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Re: Candle Light
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 19th September 2004 @ 08:40:09 AM AEST
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A very intriguing write.....Gives me a haunting image of a ghost lover, but then again I'm a bit odd :oP In any case I liked it.
Well done
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Re: Candle Light
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by Pyrofungus on
Monday, 20th September 2004 @ 07:24:42 PM AEST
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wow this is beautiful.....i'm kinda speechless....
please comment on my work too
summer |
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Re: Candle Light
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 25th September 2004 @ 08:11:44 AM AEST
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The more I read your poems the more I like, I am struggling to read everyones poetry, but one day I will, With you commenting on my poem gave another link to follow, and I am so glad I did, this poem made me feel warm in a strange sorta way, I am probaly way of track but I tend see different things in poetry.
Take care always, and i shall read on some more. |
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Re: Candle Light
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 04:31:54 PM AEST
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awwww... so sweet! hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Candle Light
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 12:12:30 PM AEST
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Very deep.
It does make one think that perhaps there is more than one meaning here, but not for all to see.
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