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Last Suicide
Contributed by
xemptydecemberx
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Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 04:14:08 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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She runs in her room and locks the door The tears in her eyes start to pour Her mind is made up, she can't turn back Because today it's courage she'll lack Courage to stay, to work things out But this will be better, without a doubt She clutches the blade in her closed fist And drives it inside of her wrist Not minding the veins, or even the bone She can't live here, not alone She slices and slices until theres no pain She swears this was the only thing keeping her sane She's threatened to take her life a few times before But no one believes her, not anymore Maybe her cutting is a helpless cry That she doesn't wanna always feel like she has to die But ***** it, its over, there will be no more This is the last time she'll ever walk out that door Her mind is racing as her fingers grow weak The pain is to much now, she can hardly speak She doesn't bother catching the blood that falls Because everyone thought she wouldn't have the balls To start cutting again, and not live to heal This is the last suicide she'll ever have to feel
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Re: Last Suicide
(User Rating: 1 ) by Luinil on
Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 05:18:13 PM AEST (User
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very powerful, especially the last line.. good write * |
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Re: Last Suicide
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 06:13:22 PM AEST (User
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this is such an awesome poem!! and it really made me think. its like i could feel what she was going thru. i love it! i cant wait to read another of your poems!! keep writing!!!! |
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Re: Last Suicide
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 06:13:23 PM AEST (User
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this is such an awesome poem!! and it really made me think. its like i could feel what she was going thru. i love it! i cant wait to read another of your poems!! keep writing!!!! |
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Re: Last Suicide
(User Rating: 1 ) by mylastwords on
Monday, 13th September 2004 @ 10:08:40 PM AEST (User
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this is a strong poem. i love it...i feel like i know what its like when ppl dont believe you have the guts to do sumthin. please keep writing, you're a beautiful writer...
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Re: Last Suicide
(User Rating: 1 ) by deathdrop on
Friday, 17th September 2004 @ 11:57:37 AM AEST (User
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wow!!!
very, very good work here!
i love it!!!
it's superb, in many ways. AMAZING!
the first to lines really pulled me in to read more, they capured me in an instant...!
and i also the the part where you've wrote "She doesn't bother catching the blood that falls
Because everyone thought she wouldn't have the balls" that's excellent there!
cheesh... you've left me speechless for what more to say!
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Re: Last Suicide
(User Rating: 1 ) by HERO on
Thursday, 19th March 2009 @ 11:17:05 AM AEST (User
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Wow, you've really captured the scary feeling of suicidial intentions, and rhymed it too! I'm very impressed.
-HERO |
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