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Miracle at sea
Contributed by
Silent_Composer
on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 07:10:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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Miracle at sea
Lashing rain, thunders might,
Lightning steaks in anger tonight,
I cringe as the nautical wind screams,
Wondering if this is the end of my dreams,
Mountainous waves loom over nigh,
Then fear as death plummets from a high,
Crushing suffocation from seas embrace,
Amplified agonies, my blood begins to race,
Lungs screaming limbs are thrashing,
Mounting pressure, senses crashing,
I struggle weakly but the distance is great,
Then darkness as I give in to my watery fate,
Hearing strange music in my world of green,
A feeling of rising, induced by something unseen,
Misty thoughts unsure hazy hallucinations,
In a calm sea, upon flotsam, without explanations,
Alive, when I should be dead,
Weak and bruised, raw and red,
Dumbfounded as to how or why,
Seeing something that makes me cry,
Lights and yells, as rescue is near,
They have seen me thank you god I share,
Later I awake surrounded in friendly faces,
Others like me, rescued racers,
Some are still lost, for them we pray,
And hope to us that they find their way,
As later told all our stories are the same,
Rescued from death by creatures of no name,
For we have awoken on a ship with no crew,
Alive and well, on a mystery with no clue.
By Silent_Composer
Copyright ©
Silent_Composer
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2004-09-15 07:10:00]
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Re: Miracle at sea
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by Hurretje on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 07:16:36 AM AEST
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Wonderful rhyme, with very nice descriptions! You can almost feel the sea sweep you off your feet. A true reading pleasure!
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Re: Miracle at sea
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 09:43:35 AM AEST
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The descriptions, imagery and flow I felt was a work of art.
This is a poem of perfection in my humble opinion.
Also unique, i've never read anything quite like it. I wish I had written it!
Kie |
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Re: Miracle at sea
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by kidpoet_213 on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 10:34:24 AM AEST
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It's unlike anyhing I've ever read b4... I love the rhythm and flow of it and the imagery... the reader actually feels as if they are there...
Great write... don't ever quite... ur quite good at this
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Re: Miracle at sea
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 16th September 2004 @ 08:51:55 PM AEST
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captivating write, love the twist at the end.... hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Miracle at sea
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by Lee on
Tuesday, 21st September 2004 @ 09:03:15 PM AEST
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Interesting. I like the imagery of the water
and the mysterious creatures. |
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