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A Twenty-Four Hour Destruction
Contributed by
Pyrofungus
on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 07:53:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Hinges on the door
Rusted and sore
Creaking ever so noisily
A wooden door
Cracked an fading
Wind blowing through the cracks in the wall
A ceiling coming together with the floor
Termites having supper as the night rolls into day
A twenty-four hour destruction
That takes a night to end
The wind becomes to fierce to face
The wood is to weak to stand
Crumbling throughout the darkness
Leaving nothing to stand
Just a lonesome pile on the ground
That had lost its strength to stand long ago
Copyright ©
Pyrofungus
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2004-09-15 19:53:07]
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Re: A Twenty-Four Hour Destruction
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 08:31:40 PM AEST
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| powerful and griping write. |
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Re: A Twenty-Four Hour Destruction
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by monophobic on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 08:36:37 PM AEST
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| this is a very well written poem. i think it has deep meaning!! well done! |
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Re: A Twenty-Four Hour Destruction
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by Bruce on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 10:41:08 PM AEST
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| what a way to go. nice write |
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Re: A Twenty-Four Hour Destruction
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 15th September 2004 @ 10:41:43 PM AEST
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Another memorable poem. Taking an ordinary every day subject and putting it into spiritual language to get your point across. That is really great, and once again shows much talent indeed!
Were you speaking of people.........I often use houses to depict persons? I really enjoyed this!
Warm love
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Re: A Twenty-Four Hour Destruction
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th September 2004 @ 05:38:51 PM AEST
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| now that was good. I enjoyed this one, had a unique flow to it/ |
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Re: A Twenty-Four Hour Destruction
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by brown_eyez_ on
Monday, 20th September 2004 @ 08:49:45 PM AEST
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| wow....very unique and powerful. i luv it. ~aimz |
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Re: A Twenty-Four Hour Destruction
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by lovesucks on
Monday, 20th September 2004 @ 11:39:51 PM AEST
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really liked this, very creative in expressing your feelings in this one. Keep writing
theresa |
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