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Suicides Tenderness
Contributed by
brokensoul
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Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 02:02:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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you took the shining blade
pressed it firmly against your skin
you were pressing as hard as you could
while you gently, tenderly, slowly drew the blade down your arm
a perfect line of blood showed
from wrist to elbow
right on the vein
it was frighteningly deep
it hurt you
but there was a strange sense of tenderness
in the pain
that tenderness you have been longing for
that tenderness that your whole life lacked
it was so beautiful
you never feeling this before
but soon you would lose to much blood
but if you die such a tender death
would the tenderness stay with you
whever your going
the pain so tender
so fullfilling
your life flys away with suicides choice
your life flys away with tenderness
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2004-09-23 14:02:40]
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Re: Suicides Tenderness
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by ArdRi79 on
Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 11:30:51 AM AEST
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| I think you expressed loss and the warming Idea that shes safe where she is MMm good one |
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Re: Suicides Tenderness
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 26th September 2004 @ 04:11:33 PM AEST
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| This was written wonderfully. The words and the ways you phrased it all were simple, but the message behind it is deep. You could also really feel the emotions in this poem. Good job! |
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Re: Suicides Tenderness
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by flamingblade on
Sunday, 5th November 2006 @ 02:32:25 PM AEST
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wow,
very well written
and fascinating
i'm sure a lot of people have felt this way
goood work. |
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