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Empty
Contributed by
PsychoticDreamz
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Thursday, 23rd September 2004 @ 11:20:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Its only the beginning
Where will it end?
Is there something I'm missing
is there something to mend?
When inside I'm broken
do you even know why?
Sometimes I feel empty
and all I want is to cry.
But you're no where near me
to save me from me
Sometimes you stay so blind
that you dont ever see.
You were always wasting time
You were holding me back
Sometimes I feel stupid
when I think of the past.
I only did what you wanted
never thought about me
I let you control me
and I couldnt be free.
Now I've finally broke loose
and I've turned things around
I was blinded by you
but my life has been found
Copyright ©
PsychoticDreamz
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2004-09-23 23:20:58]
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Re: Empty
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 05:05:28 AM AEST
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| Awesome write, showing alot of inner strength, also very emotional, thank you for sharing such beautful poetry. |
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Re: Empty
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by inoc on
Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 05:26:07 AM AEST
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this is written so wonderfully
I am so glad you submitted this as it is!
keep writing
cheers! |
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Re: Empty
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by Broken_Skin on
Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 08:24:03 AM AEST
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This was cool, not as good as the one i just read
I'll give this a 4 out of 5 because like you said
it could have been better
but still good
4 is not a bad mark, its very good
so yeah
very good
x |
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Re: Empty
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by Lionel on
Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 04:25:55 PM AEST
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Good poem. There's a lot to be said for being empty. You don't need to clear as much rubbage to refill with things worthwhile.
God Bless |
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Re: Empty
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 07:53:08 PM AEST
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I liked this 'twas very good and I like the last
line how you turned away from the sadness
and depression. Its hard to show growth in
such a short poem, but you have done so
here and I commend you *Hands her a bowl
of ice cream*
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Empty
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 24th September 2004 @ 10:54:58 PM AEST
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| amazing write. |
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