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Trees Are Human Spirits
Contributed by
WorthlesSanity666
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Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 07:47:15 PM in AEST
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Inside thetall and beautiful trees
reside dead, decaying wood.
Perhaps the trees are people's spirits,
in a living breathing form.
The deceased core is
surrounded by life and growth,
grasping at the sky
through limbs reaching for the sky,
always just out of reach.
Last, a layer of hard protection,
fierce and discouraging.
We put up barriers of our own
in much the same sense.
The boughs that stretch so high,
covered with a thick blanket of leaves,
hiding, not allowing anyone to see that
they reach,
they hope,
they live and dream.
Finally, the leaves, all that the trees have worked for, fall.
They decompose into the ground.
Now the trees are naked and vulnerable.
Now they are exposed.
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Re: Trees Are Human Spirits
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 09:24:26 PM AEST
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i also liked your concept. i didnt think this was a total waste of time discluding the concept in it. what we write thats different stretches our minds, and thats always a good thing...until it snaps back.
"The boughs that stretch so high,
covered with a thick blanket of leaves,
hiding, not allowing anyone to see that
they reach,
they hope,
they live and dream." that was my favorite part. i think this would have been better if it were broken up into stanzas, but thats just the type of poems i like ::shrugs::
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Re: Trees Are Human Spirits
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by tractorbabe on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 10:33:49 PM AEST
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| uve got the structure and the words...but maby work on ryming?i donno..the words make sence though i like it |
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Re: Trees Are Human Spirits
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by TwEeK on
Wednesday, 29th September 2004 @ 05:34:52 PM AEST
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dont listen to theyre constructive critisism.
this is your poem, and you can do what ever the hell you like! =D
good peom all the same, i like the concept.
but yea, your right...this isnt your kind of poetry, from what i can see.
keep an writin'
Tweek |
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Re: Trees Are Human Spirits
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by blackholesun on
Saturday, 2nd October 2004 @ 01:33:04 PM AEST
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| hey i did like this,im sorry but i agree with the theory too!liked it !ps i want to add you to my buddy list also |
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