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My death
Contributed by
spyke_420
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Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 08:18:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Cut my rists
No more pain
Can't see the vain
Must of mist
Pick-up the guy
Lost a lot of blood
So it weighs a ton
Put it to my head think that this must be done
Pull the triger
See a light
Keeps getting bigger and bigger
Relize the light is fire
Your such a lier
You told me if I die I would go higher
I'll see you hear soon
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2004-09-27 20:18:18]
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Re: My death
(User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 09:11:55 PM AEST
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| please work on spelling and grammar first of all, during some of this i had to second guess what you meant. other than that excellent write. trust can kill you or set you free, but choose the prison wisely that you keep. |
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Re: My death
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by blueeyedevil13 on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 10:24:56 AM AEST
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yeh its a good poem but spelling needs to be worked on. i can relate. i lost a few friends and a relitive to lies from my parents and their parents. if u want you can look at some of my poems cause i write about that ***** too.
keep writing
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