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Untitled
Contributed by
emocutie07
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Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 06:01:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Tears streaking silently down your cheek, left me numb and unable to speak
My heart crumbles into a thousand blackend pieces and fall at your feet
Head down choking back tears I turn and walk away...
Footsteps pouding behind me.. I let out a sob, trying hard not to look back
A hand clutches my shoulder,I look up at staring into your hardened eyes
Blood spills from your hand,Reaching down I press my lips to your palm..
A laugh that seemed so far away poured from your mouth...
Smiling..you threw the remains of my heart into my face
I crumbled into a thousand blackened pieces and fell beneathe your feet
Wiping the blood off your hands, you turn to walk away..and never look back
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Re: Untitled
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by xafflictedx on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 08:16:50 PM AEST
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Umm...I hope you weren't hurt this bad. Very well thought out however. A good title might be something like,
"When Beating Hearts Cease"
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"Malevolent Fortunes"
or something simple like
"Heartless" |
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Re: Untitled
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th September 2004 @ 11:27:01 PM AEST
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| Very good write, perhaps "Crimson Tears"? |
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Re: Untitled
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by holderofthestone on
Wednesday, 29th September 2004 @ 07:35:09 PM AEST
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"Smiling..you threw the remains of my heart into my face
I crumbled into a thousand blackened pieces and fell beneathe your feet" I really liked these lines here. they are strong and emotional, yet very personal. a strong write. A+++ |
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Re: Untitled
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by Deleterious_Dislike on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 08:09:25 AM AEST
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'A Thousand Blackened Pieces'
Beautiful.. |
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Re: Untitled
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 11:29:21 PM AEST
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| personally i like Judas as a refrence of how he turned his back and looked away from the damage he had done. anyway excellent write. BTW don't listen to afflicted, "When Beating Hearts Cease" is an old song title from our band, great poem here!!!!!!!! |
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