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Broken Prophet
Contributed by
Black13
on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 12:18:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Bittersweet words fall silent
as unfallen tears remain defiant
but it's all as cold as your touch.
Left to feel so numb inside.
I see it never really mattered much.
That I was always set aside.
Go on ahead and hide.
Hide from what we are inside.
Go ahead and scream how much you cried.
It never mattered,
always just some bad dream.
What I want
is what I hate.
What I need
is all I fear.
Remember what you wanted me to be
when anything that would save me
was as simple as to be free.
Let it go.
Get it done.
All we need
is to be freed.
Copyright ©
Black13
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2004-10-04 12:18:27]
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by pixie on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 12:21:30 PM AEST
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yes I agre life was very simple when we were younger, now as adults things are so much more complicated and never as they first seem, a great write, made me think,
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by faith_my_eyes on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 01:14:42 PM AEST
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if we could only master the skill of mixing childlike simplicity with maturity's wisdom, wouldn't life be bliss?
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by theMoth on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 02:38:18 PM AEST
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I like this poem.
And your format is
very complimentary to
what you are saying.
Effective.
--Mothy |
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by Stitch on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 03:02:14 PM AEST
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"All we need
is to be freed."
Amen to this stanza.
On the rest...interesting perspective. Can't help but wonder to whom this is addressed.
None of us survives unscarred.
Stitch
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by ShadowDaughter on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 03:34:00 PM AEST
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Krissie says this made her think . . . it didn't make me think. Rather, it made me feel . . . in a numb, quiet, empty sort of way I didn't really want to.
Now I'm going to go and reread this too many times--no. I will not. I will not I will not I will not--, so bye.
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 05:31:52 PM AEST
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Great write, Jeff....I've missed you...
Hope all is well..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th October 2004 @ 05:43:58 PM AEST
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I, too, have missed you a lot, Jeff. I don't think life is half as complicated as we try to make it. We seem obsessed with ourselves and our trials in life. Maybe being free is accepting who and what you are and tweaking it a bit to create happiness. But then, that would be too easy wouldn't it?!
((((hugs))))
Rita |
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 02:55:03 AM AEST
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All we need is to be freed - but how? What to let go of? What to hold on to? What to feel? What not listen to?
Sometimes it doesn't seem so clear to me.
Honest, expressive piece. Some of the lines really come home to me, though I don't quite catch it all (not at this time of night, anyway).
Take care.
Andrew |
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by Tanmaya on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 03:00:21 AM AEST
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Very well-written. I liked the intensity in this.
And the honesty.
To be free... simple words but they go so deep. Sometimes the more independant we get-- the less free we become.
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by Ronald on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:19:28 PM AEST
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| Well, it's true when we were younger, things weren't so complicated. And when we get older, we make things complicated. Well, I agree with you on this matter. You write very well over here. Thanks for sharing with us your talent :-) |
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by MoonlitAngel on
Tuesday, 19th October 2004 @ 11:54:46 PM AEST
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| And... once again... this is like my effing life right now in words. How do you do that??? |
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Re: Broken Prophet
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by emystar on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 02:15:21 AM AEST
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Wow another awesome write.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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