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Dance Solo
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 03:29:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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I lay awake last night
Head languishing on my pillow
As wind through window whispered
A quiet song of you
Heavy lids cascaded over
Forlorn and vacant eyes
Dark complected skin
Contrasts remarkably
Against light dress and lace wrap
Feet slide apart and come together
You pirouette, leap and glide
Dancing through my dreams
Closing distance
Sultry beckoning
You motion to me
Inviting me into your realm
I know slumber holds reign
Still senses are teased by aspiration
All night we danced
At times apart, across the room
Harmoniously in rhythm
Brought again together
So close ~ I felt
I breathed through you
Hours pass and sun returns
I rise refreshed and lonely
I hum a half remembered tune
As I sashay around my empty room
My eyes are drawn to the floor beside my bed
~ Where lace flutters in the morning air ~
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Nazmythian
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Re: Dance Solo
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by a_bear on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 03:33:41 PM AEST
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| I want to sing a Portuguese melody...or something. It's beautiful |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by FleurdeSang on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 03:42:57 PM AEST
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Still as perfect as before... My heart flutters like the lace adorning your bedside... This IS Beauty. Magnificent rhythm, dazzling words... My caught breath slowly returns, and I am at bliss... I waltz with the music, I flow with the words...
Je souhaite seulement rester dans vos rêves pour toujours...
Another splendiferous submission, mon plus cher chasseur! I truly love this piece. These amber eyes will come across these enchanting words once more, and many more times to come... Many thanks for sharing. Eternally yours,
Votre Fleur de Amour |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by sweettalkingwoman on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 03:50:47 PM AEST
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Reading this made me so moist ,and my eyes are dry.
This poem
has got me so damned hot and horny
my tights are stuck to my legs......
x |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by theMoth on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 04:26:14 PM AEST
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Nazzy,
Take a cigarette break!
Even if you don't smoke.
You are making everyone else's poetry
look really bad.
Except mine of course...
--Mothy |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by inoc on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 06:01:17 PM AEST
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bravo
brilliant
beautiful
thanks for the read
cheers!~ |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by xxbreathlessx on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 06:31:02 PM AEST
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| wow oh wow oh wow! one of the best poems i have ever read! i LOVED it. absoloutly beautiful and graceful. def. looking foward to more writings like this one. keep up the amazing job! |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 09:18:09 PM AEST
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Dear Naz, how your poetry does take me away sometimes. I am amazed
at every read. More each time. This one, I especially found striking.
Your words flow so freely and beautifully.
And Mothy, I am deeply wounded.
:~P
~Breezy |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 5th October 2004 @ 10:37:28 PM AEST
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Naz,
This poem is absolutely fantastic. It is probably my favorite of your works of art. The whole poem flows so beautifully. I truly wish I had your gift and talent .... to use words so exquisitly! The imagination and creativity are just astounding.
A captivating write, Willofree |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by emystar on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 01:23:05 AM AEST
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Beautifull writing.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 04:45:05 PM AEST
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| This was a great poem and the waking theme of was it real is really cool. |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 10:15:27 PM AEST
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that was amazing...The ending wrapped it up so perfectly and just the vision of two people dancing so romantically in utterly entrancing...I loved it
Mason |
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Re: Dance Solo
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 7th May 2005 @ 05:28:06 PM AEST
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Please forgive my delay in finding my way to this page to comment... I was busy running around NYC when you first posted this. Still though, I know I've ventured here since... and am unsure why I didn't comment earlier.
This... is beautiful, Scotty. I think the first and fourth stanzas are my favorites... because I can relate and because I dream similarly. Your conclusion might have left me feeling a tad melancholy... were it not for the hope distilled in that last italicized line. Lovely it is. *sigh*.
Wishing, really, that it didn't all slip away when the dawning of the sun,
~Snem~ |
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