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La Danse enchanteresse. (The enchanting dance)
Contributed by
FleurdeSang
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Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 02:46:24 PM in AEST
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DreamsandWishes
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A silent shadow lurks in the depths of my mind,
Always haunting, ever so enthralling
I receive Midnights kiss,
Sleep sings me Her intoxicating lullaby,
And I am thrown into endless darkness
Set in a world of surreal beauty,
A place where the sweet Night always reigns
Adorned with star dust and the luminous light of my infinite Moon,
Creating a pallid gown of Splendor,
Embellished with gems of Loneliness
A sharp contrast with my bittersweet caramel flesh,
Bringing out the silver in my liquid amber eyes
Harmonious music mingles with the cool winds,
A song is being sung by the most precious of voices
The dance begins,
A slow, rhythmical waltz of two lovers
I gaze into the eyes,
Only to be lost in endless pits of green
My lurking shadow, my beautiful creator of words that enchant me, entice me so
Safe and warm in his tight embrace,
Our bodies moving gracefully as one
The splendiferous hymn has ended,
The music ceased flowing,
But we still dance,
To a song only we can hear
A hymn of love played by our hearts
A tantalizing kiss, and the dream ends
The envious Sun has risen,
High and royal
My precious Muse has been slayed,
Her children long deceased
I awake, empty, lost, morbid,
Yearning forevermore for the dazzling Night to return,
So I may have another dance with my dark Prince,
He who occupies every moment of my waking hours
To slumber in his endless gaze, exist in his obscure world
To dwell in his heart forever
Let it be more than just a dream
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FleurdeSang
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2004-10-06 14:46:24]
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Re: La Danse enchanteresse. (The enchanting dance)
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by Domino on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 03:07:15 PM AEST
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Real imagery words
Good enough poem, I used to write ones simular to this but the bad point of these is that it doesn't seem to go anywhere, It just seems to drag on a bit. And a little confusing with the kind of atmosphere your trying to make, like with the line
Sleep sings me Her intoxicating lullaby,
I know later on you meant the sleep and dreams be beautiful but in my opinon this line makes it sound threatening and horrible, probably because of the word 'intoxicating'
But hey its just my opinon, |
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Re: La Danse enchanteresse. (The enchanting dance)
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 08:09:55 PM AEST
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chasse est-il comme une danse, est-il pas ?
I get it, I think. Another blissfull write of longing beautifully descriptive. It makes one desire a dance indeed.
Nazmythian ~
(Change Nothing, it is splendid) |
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Re: La Danse enchanteresse. (The enchanting dance)
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 03:11:23 PM AEST
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Intoxicating and captivating.
I felt the passion in this dance the gaze of love.
Such a dream must come true.. it is to beautiful to remain a dream
Love Sweetangelukxxxxx |
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Re: La Danse enchanteresse. (The enchanting dance)
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by felicitous on
Tuesday, 28th March 2006 @ 07:49:23 AM AEST
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| I think it should remain a dream, reality would take away all of the perfection of that dance. Anyway, I enjoyed it. |
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