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Paging Miss Violin!
Contributed by
remy
on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 12:59:08 AM in AEST
Topic:
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no!
no wait...
no!
no no no!
please tell me, you can't be serious now can you?
i mean you can but is that what you really want?
am i that much of a jerk even to you? is it true?
is this sort of thing staying now just to haunt?
would it be better if i painted more description?
not that it matters, but then again well could it?
shall these words hang rhyming on feeble fiction?
that's not how it's supposed to be or should it?
so i've some chaos to plague the evening hours
perhaps it's better that this swallows down sour
disempowered i can fumble on words dulling fast
little time has passed and perhaps this goes past
beyond every utterance from an old shade of pink
but then i'll stop and think and slowly blink
fluttering through misconcepted process times
as if that hid my feeling bleeding in the lines
that's not the thing that i really wanted said
but i already mentioned i'm better off dead!
couldn't step outside this chasm as it's closed
encased on an idea darkened in subtle prose
you remember those things you wrote them yourself
not like it helps remembering what can't be helped
but i'll help myself to billy trip further away
out of touch or reach as if i could last today
like something a ramble or a nervous skittish
incomprehendable as if i was two quarts british
that's how i could remember this to forget it
there wouldn't be a time i could ever regret it
and then it's a waste of time just as before
couldn't have escaped my mind's cold eye sore
i'd emplore you to reconsider whatever it is
keeping you out of grasp as now it is
okay!
well no!
i mean...
augh! never mind.
(a horrible write Daniela! that's all i could manage to write this time!
and every time afterwards will be just as horrible without you!!)
Copyright ©
remy
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2004-10-07 00:59:08]
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Re: Paging Miss Violin!
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 03:50:10 AM AEST
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| Awwwww dammit Daniela, I don't know what happened, but hey, hmmmm, if it encourages writes like these keep it coming! No really, just make up, please, I can't stand it ... always a sucker for these writes ... hope ya work it out ... Jan |
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Re: Paging Miss Violin!
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by a_bear on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 04:22:41 AM AEST
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Daniela, Maria..er Danny..remember the translations you did for me...well you could do another and translate this gibberish... he's going mad..c'mon...talk to the poor guy..I don't know what's going on but he's mad about you ..anyone can see that he's mad..(as a hatter..) shhh
I never said that..and the 2 quarts British..it wasn't British..but it was 2 quarts..rotflmao..just a joke.. |
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Re: Paging Miss Violin!
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by Kie on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 09:39:32 AM AEST
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Oh Remy I just feel for you. Don't give up and just keep writing her poetry.
Boy this is really pulling at my heart strings and I hope it gets to hers.
May it all work out.
Kie |
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Re: Paging Miss Violin!
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by Lee on
Thursday, 7th October 2004 @ 12:26:21 PM AEST
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| An interesting style of writing you have here. I like the emotional introduction and conclusion. |
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Re: Paging Miss Violin!
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 11:15:01 AM AEST
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| I love you... *smiles* |
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Re: Paging Miss Violin!
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 08:37:52 PM AEST
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| Awwww, isn't this sweet. *S* Cynthia |
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