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When I grow up
Contributed by
Archie
on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 09:08:18 PM in AEST
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All the things I must''ve said
when I was young and so untrained
Life had not dashed hopes or dreams
Ambitions still burned in my brain
All the time I wasted like
the water running through my hand
in search of what I longed to be
when I grew up into a man
I followed after every whim
my ship was tossed in every storm
my mind drifted far out to sea
no anchor held me to a port
no star guided where I should sail
no sun or moon I followed to
some distant point on a compass
my thoughts were caught in hues of blue
Failure taught me lessons great
I pondered paths with in my head
how oft I had to retrace steps
of craggy clifts and narrow bends
No wise man gave wisdom to me
to keep me from intrepid tests
that often wrought such agony
that seared my mind in emptiness
And only at this moment now
do I begin to understand
what new journey has been endowed
I still have not become a man
a little older now than 'fore
scars tell me where to place my hands
I sail on to that distant shore
where I will grow into a man
Copyright ©
Archie
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2004-10-08 21:08:18]
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Re: When I grow up
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 09:22:16 PM AEST
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| This has a nice rhythm to it. "intrepid tests" is an interesting line. Nice! Cheers. |
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Re: When I grow up
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by emystar on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 09:40:56 PM AEST
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Very good write.
I grew up once but didn't like so I turned back into a kid.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: When I grow up
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by Dorian on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 09:47:24 PM AEST
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verry nice recall archie, nothing like a trip down
memory lane . . . Dorian : ) |
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Re: When I grow up
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 10:45:23 PM AEST
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| great write. =] |
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Re: When I grow up
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by shanarah on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 10:46:00 PM AEST
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undeniable memories sometimes hold great values. you have uncovered a terrific write.
take care,
shanarah... |
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Re: When I grow up
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 8th October 2004 @ 10:50:55 PM AEST
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Life's journeys are not always easy, but is sure is a good way to learn lessons we need to learn well so not to make the again.
Hugs,
Rita |
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Re: When I grow up
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by pixie on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 06:26:19 AM AEST
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a very very good write, thanks for sharing
pixie xx |
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Re: When I grow up
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by inoc on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 09:25:02 AM AEST
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a wonderful write
thanks for submitting this journey
cheers!~
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Re: When I grow up
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by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 10:07:28 AM AEST
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The journeys in life are never easy. We have all made many wrong turns and taken narrow bends.
Such lessons go on and we continue to learn for life is a learning process.
Excellent Archie pause for thought poem
Love Sweetangelukxxxx |
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Re: When I grow up
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by arden on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 07:22:58 PM AEST
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wonderfully written Archie. i thoroughly enjoy your writes. this was awesome.
greatly done, keep it up.
5 stars
Arden |
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Re: When I grow up
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by Ronald on
Saturday, 9th October 2004 @ 11:52:56 PM AEST
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Hey, thanks for your wonderful comment on my poem entitled 'The Arrow'. :-)
Regarding your poem, it's nothing short of a great work of art and I really appreciate you for sharing your literary products with us all. Besides, this poem really applies to me so much... thx :-) |
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Re: When I grow up
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by JamesStockdale on
Wednesday, 19th August 2020 @ 01:16:13 PM AEST
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| Lovely write! |
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