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Dead Reckoning
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 06:13:02 PM in AEST
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Whats it gonna matter
If the worlds still turning when I die
What if I took someone with me
Jacked them up then made them fly
Thirteen stories aint that tall
Still, its a detrimental fall
And how can I show you emotion
Tears arent shed from dry dead eyes
Waiting in the rain
I thought the pain would wash away by now
Promises of love
Are simply methods of control somehow
Razored fingers held my heart
As voices laughed, it fell apart
Tumbling through the cracks and seams
Beside a ring of sacred vow
Blanketed in shadowed darkness
On the roof, we stand above
Retribution will come swiftly
Brought on by a single shove
Scream out loud as people gawk
Descend upon them like a rock
Tell me as were falling dear
What you think now about my love
Permission obtained from deadreckoning1983 prior to posting ~ Thanks Bud !!!
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Nazmythian
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Re: Dead Reckoning
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 06:22:12 PM AEST
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| excellent write as always. =] |
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Re: Dead Reckoning
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by ALineAboveTheStepBeneath on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 07:05:48 PM AEST
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| Chilling and intense. Good job. |
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Re: Dead Reckoning
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 09:12:16 PM AEST
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Naz,
You seem to have a flair for the melodramatic and there is an intenseness and provacative quality. Again the power of your words......
There is an emotional connection...
Willofree |
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Re: Dead Reckoning
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by bernard on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 02:10:17 AM AEST
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| Well written poem. Death is a fascinating subject. Myself I always try to take the micky out of death. Keep smiling from bernard. |
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Re: Dead Reckoning
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by FleurdeSang on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 02:26:05 PM AEST
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Captivating, haunting and enthralling till the very end! The thrill ride of the century! This one slaps you hard in the face, and pulls at your emotions. I love it!!
Blanketed in shadowed darkness
On the roof, we stand above
Retribution will come swiftly
Brought on by a single shove
Scream out loud as people gawk
Descend upon them like a rock
Tell me as we’re falling dear
What you think now about my love...
INCREDIBLE!!!! Simply flawless!! You have truly let your talent shine bright in this masterpiece, sweet Naz! Thank you for sharin this with us. Hope deadreckoning1983 enjoyed it! Much love! Forever,
Votre Fleur de bonheur |
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Re: Dead Reckoning
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by theMoth on
Wednesday, 13th October 2004 @ 02:33:30 PM AEST
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Serves me right for not
writing the idea I had for
a poem of the same name.
I'm sure he will like it.
It rocks.
--Mothy |
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