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Fading Habitually
Contributed by
black13
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Thursday, 21st October 2004 @ 06:44:54 PM in AEST
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Give and take,
you are my mistake
always better,
always more.
Something gone
from our lives.
We never knew
we had no chance
to make this right.
Calling me,
I'm failing you.
Never learned,
could not know,
torn apart,
from long ago.
Touched it once
I can taste again
leave me be
just toss it down...
... and I'm leaving me
I'm leaving this,
I've said it best
letting go.
Bleeding me,
bleeding we,
set me free,
one last time...
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black13
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2004-10-21 18:44:54]
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Re: Fading Habitually
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by ShadowDaughter on
Thursday, 21st October 2004 @ 08:21:05 PM AEST
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Reading this for the fourth time and wondering when I'll be able to stop. I feel like apologizing for not just leaving you alone, finally. But I can't (apologize or, it appears, leave you alone e_e), so I guess I'm commenting.
It's beautiful, Jeffrey. In that goingtoodeepgettingtooclosebackawayachingIdon'twanttoreadanymore sort of way all of your poems seem to be.
I was just about to say something about the poem vs. the content and was reminded of a comment I made on one of yours, a long time ago, when things were a lot different . . .
I don't think I'm going to talk about poem vs. content this time, now that I think of it.
But, for the record, I'm still rereading it.
Bless, Jeff.
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Re: Fading Habitually
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by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 21st October 2004 @ 08:40:20 PM AEST
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| Wow... I'm not even sure what to think about this one. I may have to read it a 3rd and 4th time, and hell, probably a lot more than that. Your words always touch me so deeply, Jeff... I just wish I knew why. |
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Re: Fading Habitually
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by Stitch on
Friday, 22nd October 2004 @ 08:25:40 AM AEST
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It's a struggle that can go on for a very long time. An elixor so sublime, even when you're sure you could refuse it, it will entice you and immerse you all over again. Breaking free is the most bittersweet feeling. You have described it well.
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Re: Fading Habitually
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 23rd October 2004 @ 10:34:45 PM AEST
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The "Habitually" in the title tugs at me. Tugs hard.... and I'm not even sure why. The poem itself leaves me wanting to say something... but not able to resolve what that should be. Maybe, just maybe, it is because I tend to get more cryptic when I'm writing about something that's difficult for me and suspect that you may be doing that here...
Essentially, what I'm saying is... I don't completely understand this, but I suspect I'm probably not supposed to... and yet, that doesn't mean it hasn't touched me. Again... you've pulled me into it and I, like the others, read this more than once.
An interesting write...
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Re: Fading Habitually
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by emystar on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 02:09:56 AM AEST
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Awesome writing.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Fading Habitually
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 03:11:32 AM AEST
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I like the author's note to this. I think it said a lot of what I wanted to say when I read the poem. Very true...
Onward.
Andrew |
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Re: Fading Habitually
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by _Raspberry_ on
Tuesday, 9th November 2004 @ 03:29:04 PM AEST
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Crimson Embrace made me want to read more of your work, and I am not dissapointed. I love your way with words.
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