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Beat of the Drums
Contributed by
black13
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Thursday, 21st October 2004 @ 06:50:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Blushing petals in blossoms fall
raising a broken spirit
so gently upon windswept tears.
Moonbeams wrapping 'round
sweetly moving closer that
star painfully parting with itself.
Scar tissue forever unhealing
as faith made slow departure.
Unbound, somehow humbled
deep within other sorrow.
Words remain unspoken still
tugging tongues to whisper
dovelike and true.
marked, eternally to remain
apart from within
as stars nova
caught in a childs eye
watching a mothers death
always in closed eye.
Silence washes in waves
enveloping fragile hearts
in purest darkness.
Reprieve is shoved in resent.
Lonely child, slave to himself
drowning hope with written word
(truth)
unspoken to needy ear and hearts.
Pure soul untouched
wasted and used
thrown to the side.
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black13
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2004-10-21 18:50:12]
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Re: Beat of the Drums
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 21st October 2004 @ 07:12:08 PM AEST
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You have always been a master of the darkness. This is no exception.
Very well done my friend
Barkeep!!
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Re: Beat of the Drums
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by MoonlitAngel on
Thursday, 21st October 2004 @ 08:45:09 PM AEST
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Wow... again... now I really don't know what to say about this. I particularly love this part --
Silence washes in waves
enveloping fragile hearts
in purest darkness.
Such beautiful images all throughout this poem... but there's just something here, I can't put my finger on what it is, but just something... arg, I'm not even making sense. Whatever. |
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Re: Beat of the Drums
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by Stitch on
Friday, 22nd October 2004 @ 08:47:18 AM AEST
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Your muse has certainly been active. If I'm reading this right, it's an interesting intropective look. We all wrestle with the darkness and the light. What's important is that we never stop getting up from the mat.
Stitch |
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Re: Beat of the Drums
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 23rd October 2004 @ 10:21:07 PM AEST
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Why aren't there more comments here?!?!?!? It makes absolutely no sense to me... seriously.
This reads like shouting on the inside that's seeped out onto the page. Incredibly poignant and quite powerful. This makes me remember back to another write of yours that really hit me... and makes me feel quite certain that I should be reading you more often. I should. Others should. This... is quite incredible. If I were allowed, I'd be dropping more than 5 stars on this piece.
Impressed and commited to visiting your page more often,
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Re: Beat of the Drums
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 07:16:01 AM AEST
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I agree with SNM that there should be more comments on this.
I was going to say some lines that I liked most...but I got to the end and I couldn't decide which ones.
This is a fantastic poem and I will echo what SNM said, this is an incredibly powerful write.
Now, I have to go read again.
Stunning write,
*hugs* Phil xxx
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Re: Beat of the Drums
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by SocialMisfit on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 11:44:41 PM AEST
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i agree as well snm has a point here this is wonderfull yet not many comments but ohh well its quality not quantity lol anyhow this was a very good read for me i liked it alot.
SM
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