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I'm afraid
Contributed by
LostDream
on
Sunday, 17th November 2002 @ 10:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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My face is down,
lost my look.
The soul I kept
inside me
became
frozen water of a river
in flood. I laugh,
when I think
about the falsehood
that I go on acting,
the weapon used for
my proud combact
against the thought of him.
Thought-memory
memory-fear...
I shiver,walking
alone towards nothing,
asking to myself,
like a macabre ossession,
a close threat
which looms over
myself,
"WHY?"
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LostDream
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2002-11-17 10:00:00]
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Re: I'm afraid
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by aernby on
Sunday, 17th November 2002 @ 10:28:39 AM AEST
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this is a good write -- some intellegent use of language (example:Thought-memory memory-fear...) on the other hand every thing between ...asking [delete "to"] myself, and "WHY?" can be left out.
still it is a good job... |
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Re: I'm afraid
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by FaithHope on
Sunday, 17th November 2002 @ 02:49:23 PM AEST
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This was such a sad poem, so full of emotion. I hope you can get over this and smile. Please let your heart sing again.
*Faith*Hope* |
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Re: I'm afraid
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 01:11:19 AM AEST
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Dream, this is sad, but a good write.
Jenni |
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