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The Death Of All
Contributed by
eyesxcriedxout1989
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Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 04:10:27 PM in AEST
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In the end of all
When we all shall fall
Rocking the world
Into a dreamless lull
The cries of those born to nothing
Ring shrill to the night
Bell tolls will tear across the void
Filling rivers with blood
To merge with the seas
'Twil be the end
And judgement will be made
But, still, will result
In the death of all
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eyesxcriedxout1989
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2004-10-25 16:10:27]
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Re: The Death Of All
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by Arius-Inues on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 04:14:51 PM AEST
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| Very good and very well written. Not much more to say...sorry. |
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Re: The Death Of All
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by bonita2689 on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 08:38:45 PM AEST
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Yes it's strange but truly a unique write. Nice job!
-Kristin |
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Re: The Death Of All
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by Essentially9 on
Monday, 25th October 2004 @ 10:05:32 PM AEST
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| very nice. =] |
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Re: The Death Of All
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by nabokovfan87 on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 02:44:03 PM AEST
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| the point seems kinda choppy just because of the rhyme scheme. when you started it off it was good for the first two lines then that focus got lost or diverted or whatever. maybe a second look or a rewrite will produce better results keep at it good luck with future writing...... |
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