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The Song of Martyrs
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Baronhawk
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Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 03:47:12 AM in AEST
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O! sons and daughters
I am doomed to never know
O! childs of fathers
lost like fallen snow
O! childs of mothers
whose tears would ever flow
we sing you this song
perched on battle's brows
we sing you this song
on eve of nevermore
Farewell! Fare thee well!
to sons and daughters
that we will never know
to sisters and mothers
farewell we bid you now
to wives and lovers
a kiss of love we blow
Farewell! Fare thee well!
We sing our final song
perched on battle's brow
the eve of nevermore.
Wipe your away tears
still your gentle cries
we sing you this song
with hearts full of joy
So long my little dears
we'll look upon you soon
from the clouds high above
as we float on angels song.
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Baronhawk
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2004-10-26 03:47:12]
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Re: The Song of Martyrs
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by Avarice_Riot on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 04:02:18 AM AEST
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| I admire your ability to conjure up such a vivid scene and emotions here...I am reminded of the Lord Of The Rings trilogy which evoked similiar emotions in me. I loved reading this, it really makes you think about war and all the sacrifices that the people who choose or are forced to fight for it have to make. |
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Re: The Song of Martyrs
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 07:37:26 AM AEST
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I'm with A_R here, Baronhawk.
The song I heard sang was by many mortal voices, living for the Now... it seemed epic and romantic.
Just one line i'd change -
"So long my little dears"
- That sounds like it comes from one's grandparents. Its not quite as battle-ready as the rest of the piece.
Well done, though.
keep writing. |
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Re: The Song of Martyrs
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 26th October 2004 @ 10:26:33 AM AEST
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I have fallen so far behind on reading poetry. This brought tears to my eyes by the time I got to the last stanza.
I loved it completely.
Very well done.
Kie |
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Re: The Song of Martyrs
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by avanottingham on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 08:22:23 AM AEST
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I have to agree with neptunes_first in that it gave the feel of something epic, something I'd barely scratched the surface of, and a longing for more. Very romaticized.
I also very much enjoyed the style of your wording, it reminded me of Shakespeare.
Great poem! |
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