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The Girl At The Fair
Contributed by
pander
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Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 10:58:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I once took a ride on a Waltzer
Sitting next to beautiful girl
As we spun around
I heard not the sound
That was marking the end of my world.
As the music played on
Was it Radio 1?
Her telephone started to ring.
I thought "what the heck"
It was only a text
I knew not the bad news it would bring.
As we left the ride
Then she started to hide,
To read in a corner and grin
I knew then and there
I would never win her
Once she had a message from him!
The rain it poured down
As we walked around
Enjoying the fun of the fair
I knew it looked grim
Now that she wanted him
If she knew how much I wanted her!
My feelings inside
I just could not hide
Something just had to be said
So as people had fun
Then I really had none
As my heart filled with fear and dread.
I told her I loved her
I told her I'd stay
Do anything for her I can
But she looked at me
And as sweet as could be
She said she had some other man
So there in the rain
I just hid all the pain
And said I was happy for her.
But deep in my heart
I was falling apart
For the girl I had met at the fair.
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pander
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2004-10-28 10:58:37]
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Re: The Girl At The Fair
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by pixie on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 11:00:48 AM AEST
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wow Pander, you really have suprised me with your ability to write with great flow and expression.
Such a sad write, I hope this is not from personal experience? *hugs*
takecare my friend,
pixie xx |
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Re: The Girl At The Fair
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by ArdRi79 on
Thursday, 28th October 2004 @ 04:00:20 PM AEST
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| THis is sad and yet at the same time shows alot of strength a real man poem, congrats on the write,. I liked the unusual rhyming structure you used |
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