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Depth of my smile
Contributed by
crash
on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 07:34:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
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We went through hurt
we went through hell
but it got better
now all is well
my pains I have
but are deep within
my new new life
now begins
I took a little
I gave alot
I felt my work wasted
but it was not
For we are together
and with her I will be
for she helps me cope
with my misery
She makes me smile
which is rare
I found a life
when mine was bare
this goood new life
which now we share
When to me
my life was a loss
she grew on me
like a sweetmoss
now I win
again and again
for she makes me smile
deep within
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2004-10-29 07:34:58]
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Re: Depth of my smile
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by girish on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 07:40:50 AM AEST
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| nice tribute. but i can`t get to know who gets the tribute anyway nice to share your joys and i even could smile |
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Re: Depth of my smile
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 08:09:49 AM AEST
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| I loved this one. It was really cool. I am glad you have a positive outlook after going through hell. Most people loath in self pity and their misery, but you had the courage to try again. I really liked the way you wrote this. It was simple and simply delightful! |
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Re: Depth of my smile
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by RhythmBndt on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 09:29:19 AM AEST
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Very deeply emotional write.
I can relate to it. |
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Re: Depth of my smile
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by pixie on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 09:32:03 AM AEST
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a great ending, :) glad that you and your girl have pulled through the hard times, love aint never easy lol, emotional and deep, a great write,
pixie xx |
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Re: Depth of my smile
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by lilracer37 on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 09:41:02 AM AEST
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| It was an overall really good poem, I just wish the guy I'm in love with felt the same way about me as you do about your girl. If she makes you feel that special dont lose her. |
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Re: Depth of my smile
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 03:06:56 PM AEST
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| fantastic write. |
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