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I am Them, They are Me
Contributed by
Red_October
on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 02:28:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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These people walking through the streets
with umbrellas and soaking wet feet
So unaware of what is going on in and around their own lives
So unaffected and so deprived
These people in their daily throes
('tho unaware) are perplexed by what comes and goes
Breathing in mortality
Breathing out duality
These people are nothing like me
Unconcerned about things they can't see
Depthless ghosts of life itself
Beautiless confessions left to rot on the shelf
These people are mystified, unglued
with their umbrellas and soaking wet shoes
So apathetic and indifferent to the world overflowing
So willing to remain unknowing
And these people are just the same as me
Blowing around uncontrollably
with their empty stares
with their lack of knowledge of world affairs
I am them, they are me
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Red_October
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2004-10-29 14:28:51]
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Re: I am Them, They are Me
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by alyssakoren_03 on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 02:39:46 PM AEST
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| o wow that was wonderful one of the best i have ever read.........gave me this wierd feelings (in a good way) you have lots of talent. i think i know where you are coming from. what the poem means but i can never be sure. but still AWESOME WRITE.....i absoulty loved it |
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Re: I am Them, They are Me
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 29th October 2004 @ 02:59:54 PM AEST
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| fantastic write. very well written. |
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Re: I am Them, They are Me
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 30th October 2004 @ 07:17:59 AM AEST
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Very well written. I am them.
Keep writing. |
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Re: I am Them, They are Me
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by newbabel on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 09:43:01 PM AEST
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Once again you've got some awesome lines in there; some truly great imagery.
"Depthless ghosts" & "Beautiless confessions" are both really powerful couplings.
I also really liked the repetition with the "umbrellas and soaking wet shoes".
Good job. |
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Re: I am Them, They are Me
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by Scarlett on
Wednesday, 19th January 2005 @ 09:57:22 AM AEST
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that was amazing. your choice of words is perfect.
"so willing to remain unknowing"
loved that, wish i'd have thought of it.
with their empty stares,
with their lack of knowledge of world affairs"
loved that too!
you really do have a gift, to use simple words to such effect! x |
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