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The Greatest Teenage Romance With The Greatest Fall
Contributed by
SuchGreatHeights
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Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 06:23:54 PM in AEST
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Lets talk this over, over drinks, and maybe we can score a point tonight
try to keep those hands to yourself,
cause this look means business, the lights turned down don't improve your odds
the way words slip off your tongue is so beautiful,
so please, i plead, im running out of breath, i never said i would beg,
your looks come close, but your attention doesnt give easy,
not at all, especially to me,
im thinking something crazy, like wishes to a bad star, and
i cant stop this, so why did you say all those things?
they meant alot more than just nothing,
oh yea, too much sweetheart,
this is poor Romeo and Juliet, this will hit the headlines tomorrow,
come and get it, the print is still fresh, and she said
"dont let it get to your head, it will just kill you" and kill me it did, maybe ill learn to hate you,
like the marks on this wrist,
put your bets against me, (i am)
i hope you get everything you deserve, so lets go,
so i can watch you break your word,
your so pretty with pity in your eyes,
and you love me more when i lie,
i must look so cold, cause your so warm,
is your name carved on my arm that cool?
this is such hopeful wishful thinking, its making me sick
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Re: The Greatest Teenage Romance With The Greatest Fall
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by emystar on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 06:37:32 PM AEST
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Great writing and full with personal thoughts, fears etc.
luv, huggs, smiles,
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Re: The Greatest Teenage Romance With The Greatest Fall
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 09:11:10 PM AEST
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| excellent write. |
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Re: The Greatest Teenage Romance With The Greatest Fall
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by Living_In_My_Dream on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 11:40:02 PM AEST
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"your so pretty with pity in your eyes,
and you love me more when i lie,
i must look so cold, cause your so warm,"
those lines rang something in my ear Im not sure what it meant your band is lucky to have you...your a very talented writer I hope you never give up...I'd be dissapointed if you did...lol well please keep them coming...and Ill keep giving you my opinion...
much love,
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Re: The Greatest Teenage Romance With The Greatest Fall
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by ShadowDaughter on
Sunday, 31st October 2004 @ 11:45:15 PM AEST
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Fantastic, wonderful, superb (any more superlatives needed?) poem. Some of the lines in this just blew me clean away. I am *very* impressed; do keep it up!
--Nora
P.S. Grammatical errors sorta detract from this poem's power, however. Maybe ask someone to edit them first? I'd be glad to, if no one else wants. |
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Re: The Greatest Teenage Romance With The Greatest Fall
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 06:37:30 PM AEST
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This was awesome...seriously...was it inspired by Taking Back Sunday...a lot of the lines reminded me of a few songs
Mason |
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