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Abes Exodus, Another Adventure
Contributed by
Dan666
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Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 03:16:51 PM in AEST
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The funny dude is back from the wild,
He acts so tough, But he is quite mild,
His epic quest has been filed,
He's on another, Back through the wild.
Abe's his name, Stand quite clear,
'Cos sligs and slogs will be near,
Put your hands together, Every one cheer,
Abe quick run, there's a slig, with a gun.
Now we all know, how brave is he?
Abe can stand, Abe can flee.
Abe's the one to come and see,
If your getting chased, by a swarm of bees
They fly around, drop bombs, their small,
Abe just stands there, standing tall,
I am not sure what they are called,
But to Abe, they're mean and crawl.
What's that smell Abe, you let one go?
You funny creature, with just three toes,
I'm out of here, i'll see Abe in a mo'
Then I'll control him, 'til we both a pro!
Copyright ©
Dan666
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2004-11-01 15:16:51]
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Re: Abes Exodus, Another Adventure
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by Clementine on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 03:35:47 PM AEST
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| The first thing that came to my head after reading this was a picture of some kinda "Annie Get your Gun"/Grimm fairytale creature story...(dont ask!) lol..It made me smile...Wonderful, wonderful write :) |
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Re: Abes Exodus, Another Adventure
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by Dawny on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 03:49:24 PM AEST
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This brings back memories of playing abes oddessy, fantastic game
"follow me"
"no"
*slap*
"follow me"
"ok"
LMAO
Excellent poem Dan
Love Dawny xxx |
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Re: Abes Exodus, Another Adventure
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by AliB on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 04:47:41 PM AEST
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Daniel, I think this is fantastic!!! I love the way you make this rhyme and your words are very well described. Well done, keep writing you've got a definite talent!!
Ali xxxxxxx (or mum to you!!) |
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Re: Abes Exodus, Another Adventure
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 05:01:10 PM AEST
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This is great stuff Dan, never played it myself,
but good tight rhyming, very well written.
Johnny. |
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Re: Abes Exodus, Another Adventure
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by Nardo on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 12:56:51 PM AEST
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Hey Dan666,
I'm not sure whats going on but I like it! It has a colorful feel and the flow is fun.
Nardo |
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