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Dream Me To You
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Monday, 1st November 2004 @ 11:56:07 PM in AEST
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A quiet, lonely moment this
Trapped within a hopeless wish
A vision etched in invisible hues
An emptiness born of missing you
Words rush in and slip away
Desperate I, for you this day
A solitary thought stands amid
Every word that you once said
For I am lost to moments past
Wanting you to return at last
And to never again slip away
Desperate I, for you to stay
An isolated, forlorn heart
Knows it cannot survive apart
So close your eyes to dream anew
So that I may be there with you
Well meet as reality slips away
Desperate I, for night this day
A moment waits just beyond
There, already, my heart has gone
Dream me then into that place
Let me have you until day breaks
Find me as sunlight slips away
Desperate I, for that you may
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 12:10:26 AM AEST
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| sounds like my whole life |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by MickeyPigKnuckles on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 12:19:41 AM AEST
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| This poem is so well versed and has an awesome message. I admire your talent and want to Thank You for sharing a little of yourself with myself and so many other readers. Great Job. Your Friend MickeyPigKnuckles :o) |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 12:36:21 AM AEST
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wow greatly composed.. i enjoyed reading this one alot.. great write
Peace and hope
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by outsider on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 02:11:04 AM AEST
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| Excellent write |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 03:30:49 AM AEST
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wow snm! i could feel the emotion building up as i read this, i loved the end lines,
the desparate i's a fantastical write.
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 07:06:44 AM AEST
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wonderfully composed, a great write,
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 05:54:59 PM AEST
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How genuinely pleased am I, that through such emotional longing and physical distance, you are able to pen words of clarity and beauty. This is a beautiful write that captures the attention fo anyone who has ever been distanced from a loved one at any level. Well written !!
Dream Sweetly SNM, he is certain to do the same, untill such time as those dreams are capable of being drawn into the fires that forge reality.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Rakerman1999 on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 04:26:38 PM AEST
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Damn......this hits a bit too close to the heart.
I have felt this desperation.....and the horrible realization that it would never be.
As if you took this from my life.......
Very well done Christine.
Roses by the score
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by emystar on
Thursday, 4th November 2004 @ 01:18:35 AM AEST
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Well it's jus like a bit of heaven on Earth!
Very unique powerfull masterpeice.
luv, huggs, smiles, dreaming,
emy |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by venkat on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 05:19:44 AM AEST
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"A moment waits just beyond There, already, my heart has gone..Dream me then into that place..Let me have you until day breaks". that is the heart's yearning..its a marvellous write. beautifully touching.:-) venkat
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by blueheart on
Friday, 5th November 2004 @ 10:47:40 PM AEST
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| God, I wish I had the amazing talent you do. Loved this. I promise I'll look through all of your new stuff once i have time on my hands. Hats off to you. :) |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by arden on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 07:29:31 PM AEST
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utterly beautiful SMN. i loved this. the rhyme shame was smooth the emotion displayed so touching.
this was a awesome write. greatly done.
5 stars
Becky |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Kie on
Sunday, 7th November 2004 @ 01:04:03 PM AEST
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You engrave a signature that is outstanding when you write. Its very special.
This was truly elegant yet sadly so.
Who couldn't relate to this? I loved and I do mean LOVED--
"Find me as sunlight slips away"
This is one of those times where i'm eating junk food, reading poetry and mumbling to myself (wishing I had written that!)
Kie
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th November 2004 @ 03:20:43 PM AEST
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This is.....so wonderful....
The longing...the missing of someone dear is so strong in this. It cannot be denied.
You have the abitily to put your heart right on the page, and then to put down the words so elequently....that the emotion just flows off the page and into the reader.
As I said.....just wonderful!! |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 7th November 2004 @ 07:47:02 PM AEST
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A beautifully written poem in structure and verse. A profound expression of feelings and longings that most people can really relate to. A real heartfelt message.
A wonderful write
Willofree
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by SweetRhythm on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 10:11:54 AM AEST
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What truly beautiful sentiments. This was very delightful. I really enjoyed every verse. Had great rythem & flow. Realy nice piece of work.
Thanks for sharing.
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by neveryours on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 10:13:06 AM AEST
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Thought this was nice - would change this line however,
A vision etched in invisible hues
It kind of jerked along an otherwise lovely path |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th November 2004 @ 01:23:57 AM AEST
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I really love this one, it's so beautifully bittersweet and is truly written to perfection. I'm left in awe of your talent.
Take Care
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 07:32:51 AM AEST
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| heart wrenching.. |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th March 2005 @ 01:02:02 AM AEST
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| Simply Beautifully Written! |
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Re: Dream Me To You
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 02:57:38 AM AEST
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*thinks*
We've all probably had these thoughts a time or few.
It really is a loving beautiful poem.
Timber
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