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Take This Pain Away
Contributed by
RhythmBndt
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Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 08:30:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
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No one can take this pain away
No one but me, myself & I
No one can tell me not to
It's my personal decision
Nothing's gone right for me
From my first day on Earth
Meeting people
To have them back away
Leaving me alone
In my darkened, lonely room
Here, the blood flows
Not from cuts or bruises
From my heart down to my feet
I feel myself growing weak
Take me to perfection
Out of this world of reality
Reality is a ruthless foe
Fantasy is my friend
Where love always exsist
& I'll never forget you, my friend
Copyright ©
RhythmBndt
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2004-11-02 20:30:34]
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Re: Take This Pain Away
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by jade01 on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 08:37:37 PM AEST
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| Good poem!! |
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Re: Take This Pain Away
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 2nd November 2004 @ 09:05:02 PM AEST
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| good write. =] |
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Re: Take This Pain Away
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 06:52:03 AM AEST
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well expressed dark write, I wish I could take your pain away *hugs*
takecare
pixie xx |
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Re: Take This Pain Away
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by Red_October on
Wednesday, 3rd November 2004 @ 11:52:32 AM AEST
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"Here, the blood flows
Not from cuts or bruises
From my heart down to my feet
I feel myself growing weak"
I really like this stanza the best. The whole poem flows well. Nice write. Tiffany J. (Red_October)
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Re: Take This Pain Away
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by thumper on
Tuesday, 28th August 2007 @ 11:46:31 PM AEST
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Wow. This is spoken by a truely lonely person. I feel this way all the time.
My heart goes out to you. I hope someday you find happiness.
Good write. Keep it up. Hope to read more.
Peace to you
Thumper :o) |
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