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murder - suicide
Contributed by
merry
on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 06:53:51 PM in AEST
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Cold wrapped itself around her
Holding her in a death grip
She shivered and rattled
But could not break free
The gun stuck into her ribs painfully
She knew he meant it
His rage spit in her face
She didnt make a sound
She could barely breathe
He shook her like a rag doll
Demanding answers
The gun smashed against her cheek
She knew he meant it
His rage spit in her face
He loved her more than life itself
Why didnt she understand that
He cried himself to sleep at night
Why wouldnt she say she loved him?
The gun went off in his hand
He felt her fall limp in his arms
She died without saying a word
The gun went off
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Re: murder - suicide
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by _Raspberry_ on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 06:55:31 PM AEST
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| Wow. A good, disturbing write. |
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Re: murder - suicide
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 09:03:37 PM AEST
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| great write, very powerful. |
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Re: murder - suicide
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by assassinatorgirl on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 09:09:09 PM AEST
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| aww that's so sweet ^-^ and kinda sad. great job =) |
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Re: murder - suicide
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 09:22:58 PM AEST
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wow......You made this so real. I could hear the shot ring out. You are the best at this.
Roses for my daisy
Larry |
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Re: murder - suicide
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by pixie on
Sunday, 7th November 2004 @ 06:25:25 AM AEST
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wow, very dark, well written,
pixie xx |
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Re: murder - suicide
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 7th November 2004 @ 03:38:39 PM AEST
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So different for you, but so stark and real.
Stitch |
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