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Walk Away Now
Contributed by
BrookeStar
on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 07:22:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I say I hate you
That you deserve to die
But know body beleives me
They say I just need to cry
But It's not what I want
It's not what I need
You need to leave now
Just let me be
Get out of my life
Leave me alone
Walk away now
Go get stoned
Let go of my hand
I don't love you know more
You broke my heart
Walk out that door
Don't you look back
Walk away now
This is where I got stuck someone please help me out from here
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BrookeStar
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2004-11-06 19:22:37]
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Re: Walk Away Now
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by Doriens_Picture on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 07:43:56 PM AEST
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yeah i have been writing from the age of 13 and still find now hard to rhyme this is what i think for the next line
i have see you with out your shroud
seen what you are and i just don't
like you any more so please just get out
or something like that i guess
hope it helps |
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Re: Walk Away Now
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 6th November 2004 @ 08:59:55 PM AEST
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| excellent write. im 15 and ive been writing for 2 years i guess. its still pretty new to me because i experiment. but this was very well written, very songlike. great rhythym and rhymes. if you get stuck you can always go back later and add more. there is no need to force anything that isnt there. if you force it, you ruin it. when inspiration hits you, run with it, and when you run out of it, you have to stop. its like a game i guess, if you force a play you end up hurting the team more. if you arent playing well you should be taken out, it helps the team. keep up the fantastic writes =] |
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