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thoughts inside
Contributed by
me_n_me_alone
on
Wednesday, 20th November 2002 @ 12:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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your gonna lose it
its coming soon
hurry fast
stare at the moon
the only place
is in your mind
that you can hold
the emotions inside
but now you cant
its coming soon
you can here it
the erie tune
you cant ignore it
its coming fast
the erie tune
of your sorrowful past
you tell it to go
you tell it to leave
but they dont understand
only you can see
for its your troubles
its your past
its the things
that kill you fast
they take you places
where your alone
to find yourself
cut to the bone
it doesnt hurt
it only stings
but not for long
just too many things
they say it would kill you
just give it some time
you would go to far
your all the same kind
now youve done it
youve given in
come to my palace
youve died in sin
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2002-11-20 12:00:00]
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Re: thoughts inside
(User Rating: 1 )
by Chaos on
Friday, 22nd November 2002 @ 03:33:17 AM AEST
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| Very nice, and thought provoking, i like it. |
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Re: thoughts inside
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th January 2004 @ 05:11:08 AM AEST
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| definitely one of your best poems. I love it. it trails out a little at the end. the last four lines are awesome. The eight above it however could use a little work, they don't really fit the flow of the rest. Other than that...I love it |
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