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Would you even see...
Contributed by
EternalNight4x
on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:00:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
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If I were to die, would you even see
That it was you who had killed me
If I were to cry, would you even see
That it was you who brought these tears to me
If I were to fall, would you even try
To help me up and help me get by
If I were to live, would you even try
To live your life without a lie
If I were to scream, would you even see
That it was you that planted this fury in me
If I were to cut, would you even see
That it was you that placed these scars on me
If I were to run, would you even try
To get me back to my former life
If I were to drown, you would even try
To save me and not let me die
If I were to bleed, would you even see
That it was you who had disfigured me
If I were to die, would you even see
That it was you who had killed me
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Re: Would you even see...
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by kaitolyn on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:06:44 AM AEST
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wow! i really like that poem.
i love people who put feelings in poetry.
it's great! |
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Re: Would you even see...
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by CAUGHTinAdream on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:10:03 AM AEST
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| Wow this was great! I can really relate. It hurts to feel that way but just remember things will always get better! But anyway i enjoyed reading this, keep up the great work |
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Re: Would you even see...
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:11:07 AM AEST
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| Very visual amd full of flowing feelings, sorrow spilled forth in a full river fload, like a dam broached your words just flowed with strength, a beautiful write. |
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Re: Would you even see...
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by screwup on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:15:06 AM AEST
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good and dark... just the way i like it... great job.
~screwup |
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Re: Would you even see...
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by Unheard_Mute on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 11:21:20 AM AEST
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| indeed, great write |
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Re: Would you even see...
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by pixie on
Saturday, 13th November 2004 @ 12:00:04 PM AEST
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very dark and very sad, powerfully written,
takecare,
pixie xx |
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Re: Would you even see...
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by cocacola1331 on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 08:35:06 PM AEST
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| Eerie, because those thoughts have crossed my mind also. I wish somebody would notice, somebody would care, but they don't. I wish I could offer you the things that I'm wishing and silently begging for, but I can't... I'm sorry, but really, if you ever feel the need to ***** out all the pain, Dev, I'm here... ha, I'm here in my own cynical way. |
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