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Internal Hollocaust
Contributed by
GurlyGirl
on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 03:47:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Light the matches See the flame Forget my face Forget my name Just like the candle On the ledge I'm on fire I'm on edge Feel the burning Deep inside Scolding Hate And searing pride My brain explodes Inside my head I'm too alive To just be dead My blood will boil Skin turns black I've gone too far To take it back My heart is sinking So far down I throw away The sacred crown The chance I once Posessed to live Was not enough For me to give You hurt me 'till I fell apart You lit the fire In my heart No longer is it Harmless fun I tried to turn I tried to run But like the devil Perched on your shelf Can't hide the pain Inside yourself Death by fire Burning hot My organs all Begin to rot No one knows No one will see The evil sin You gave to me No one knows What it's about I'm dying from The inside out
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2004-11-14 15:47:35] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Internal Hollocaust
(User Rating: 1 ) by alyssakoren_03 on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 03:49:39 PM AEST (User
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omgosh i loved that it was so good!! props to you!! |
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Re: Internal Hollocaust
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 04:02:36 PM AEST (User
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your poems flow nicely
however what makes them work is the pain you are obviously feeling right now. hope things turn out better for you, i'd like to see what you can do with poetry when you're happy :) |
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Re: Internal Hollocaust
(User Rating: 1 ) by Dralion on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 05:54:38 PM AEST (User
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Very good!
Just let it out. As Shrek says "Better out than in" |
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Re: Internal Hollocaust
(User Rating: 1 ) by amatt on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 06:08:24 PM AEST (User
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i read one of your other ones too that was great and this one was too....i really like your poems
major ups to you |
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Re: Internal Hollocaust
(User Rating: 1 ) by CrimsonTears on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 10:30:55 PM AEST (User
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wow!...that was fantastic....i absolutely loved it...very dark and powerful....amazing poem.....great job
Lots of Love
CrimsonTears |
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